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【題目】（深圳市寶安中學(xué)2017-2018年度初三期中）你叫James，是初三的一名學(xué)生，你的好朋友Joyce近期很煩惱，她上周日因為使用手機的問題與她父親發(fā)生了爭吵，她父親把她手機都摔壞了。她這幾天情緒很低落，學(xué)習不認真，你很擔心她，所以你給她寫了一封信。

要點：

1. 你非常理解她的感受。

2.對她的問題提出至少兩點建議。

注意：

1. 詞數(shù)：80詞左右（開頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)）；

2. 文章必須包含所有提示內(nèi)容，并可適當發(fā)揮；

3. 文中不得出現(xiàn)真實姓名和校名；

4. 條理清楚，語句通順，意思連貫，書寫規(guī)范。

參考詞匯：1. have a quarrel與……吵架 2. treat 對待 3. affect 影響

Dear Joyce,

I am so sorry to hear that you had a quarrel with your father and he even broke your smart phone.

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Best wishes!

Yours,

James

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Joyce,

I am so sorry to hear that you had a quarrel with your father and he even broke your smart phone.

I can fully understand your feelings. We want to depend more on ourselves but sometimes our parents still treat us like a primary school student. You have different opinions on using a smart phone with your father. I think your father is worried that using a smart phone may affect your study. After all, we are in Grade 9 and we must try our best to study. Here I have two suggestions for you.

First, you should find a chance to communicate with your father when you both calm down. If you don’t want to talk to him, you can write a letter or an email to him.

Second, I think you should forget this unhappy thing and start to study hard again. Time is very valuable for us, so we can’t afford to waste it .Please raise your spirits!

Best wishes!

Yours,

James

【解析】這篇習作的層次清晰，內(nèi)容飽滿，表達流暢。文中使用了非常好的短語，例如be sorry to do，have a quarrel with，want to do，depend on，have different opinions on sth.，after all，try our best to study，communicate with sb.，talk to sb.，start to do，can’t afford to等。而We want to depend more on ourselves but sometimes our parents still treat us like a primary school student. I think your father is worried that using a smart phone may affect your study. / If you don’t want to talk to him, you can write a letter or an email to him.等多種從句結(jié)構(gòu)的運用，使本文內(nèi)容豐富，表達流暢；同時，Firstly、Secondly等詞使文章層次清晰、敘述自然，是本文的亮點所在。