Question

近來(lái)各種污染非常嚴(yán)重，已經(jīng)影響了人們的日常生活。假如你是張琳，請(qǐng)你給各界朋友些一封信，說(shuō)說(shuō)污染對(duì)人們生活造成的影響，并呼吁大家行動(dòng)起來(lái)環(huán)境。（開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾一給出，不急入總詞數(shù)）

影響	1.有各種各樣的污染。 2水污染使我們沒(méi)有足夠多的飲用水 3空氣污染最嚴(yán)重，我們不得不在室內(nèi)做各種活動(dòng)……。
希望	1.出行不開(kāi)車，改乘公交或騎自行車。 2節(jié)約用水，隨手關(guān)閉水龍頭 3都栽樹(shù)種花，循環(huán)利用書(shū)紙……。

 要求：表格中每欄已經(jīng)給出一項(xiàng)內(nèi)容，其他內(nèi)容自擬。至少再寫出兩項(xiàng)。
Dear Friends,
My name is Zhang Lin. I’m a middle school student ___________________________
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Zhang Lin

Answer 1

Dear Friends,
My name is Zhang Lin. I’m a middle school student. At present, the pollution of our environment is becoming more and more serious. There are all kinds of pollution. The water is polluted so we don’t have enough water to drink. And the air pollution is the worst, which make us can’t do exercise outside. Instead, we have to take activities indoor. Also, the earth gets polluted, and some plants have something bad for our health.
Since the pollution has bad effects on our lives, we must take some methods to deal with it. We can ride or take a bus instead of driving a car. We also need to save water. Besides, we can plant more trees and flowers. They can make the environment more beautiful and cleaner.
I think our environment can be improved.

試題分析：這是一篇命題作文。題中已經(jīng)給出了寫作的要點(diǎn)和要求。在寫作時(shí)，要注意要點(diǎn)信息的齊全。文章的各類信息要有效組織起來(lái)，并且使用一些過(guò)渡性的句子和短語(yǔ)來(lái)加強(qiáng)文章的結(jié)構(gòu)。同時(shí)，句子表達(dá)要完整準(zhǔn)確，注意主謂一致和時(shí)態(tài)等問(wèn)題。
【亮點(diǎn)分析】這篇文章要點(diǎn)齊全，表達(dá)準(zhǔn)確流利。文中使用了一些很有用的句型和表達(dá)方式，例如：And the air pollution is the worst, which make us can’t do exercise outside.空氣污染是最嚴(yán)重的，這使我們不能在戶外進(jìn)行運(yùn)動(dòng)；which引導(dǎo)一個(gè)非限制性定語(yǔ)從句。Since the pollution has bad effects on our lives, we must take some methods to deal with it.既然污染對(duì)我們的生活帶來(lái)了不好的影響，我們必須采取措施來(lái)解決它。Since因?yàn)�；deal with處理。