Question

【題目】下面是Learning English雜志社發(fā)給全國中學(xué)生的一封電子郵件。假如你叫李華，你對(duì)該郵件中的問題很感興趣，請(qǐng)你給該雜志社的編輯回一封電子郵件，參與此次活動(dòng)。

Dear students,

There must be some rules in your family, right? How do you like them? What's the best rule and what's the worst rule? Please e-mail us and share your thoughts with our readers.

Learning English

Dear students,

There must be some rules in your family, right? How do you like them? What's the best rule and what's the worst rule? Please e-mail us and share your thoughts with our readers.

Learning English

要求：詞數(shù)90左右，電子郵件的格式和開頭已給出，但不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。

Dear Editor,

There are many rules in my family, some good and some bad.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

Yours,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Editor,

There are many rules in my family, some good and some bad. I have to be home by 8:00 p.m. It's the best rule because it's dangerous to come back home late. I'm not allowed to watch TV on school nights. In my opinion, I need time to relax instead of studying all the time. This is a bad rule but the worst one is that I'm not allowed to join any clubs. My parents think it would be bad for my schoolwork. It's a pity because I'm very interested in basketball.

I wish my parents could understand me and give me more freedom.

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】

本文屬于話題作文，談?wù)撃愕募乙?guī)。根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定并準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯，可適當(dāng)增加內(nèi)容。

亮點(diǎn)說明：這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，很好的完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)，語言表達(dá)符合英語習(xí)慣，準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)、主謂一致，特別使用一些亮點(diǎn)詞句，如be allowed to do, in my opinion, instead of, all the time, be bad for以及be interested in等。增強(qiáng)邏輯關(guān)系，增加上下文意思連貫，用詞準(zhǔn)確，句子通順，行文連貫。