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18．"安全重于泰山"，尤其是學(xué)生們的安全更是牽動著無數(shù)人的心．交通安全、飲食安全、人生安全…無不和我們的生活息息相關(guān)．請你以"How to Keep Safe？"為題，說說學(xué)生應(yīng)該如何保證自己的安全，寫一篇80字左右的英語短文．
要求：1．根據(jù)以上提示，適當(dāng)發(fā)揮．
2．文中不得出現(xiàn)真實的地名、校名、人名．
3．給出自己合理化的建議．
4．開頭部分已給出，不記入總字?jǐn)?shù)．


How to Keep Safe？
Every day we hear lots of traffic，food and some other safety problems．Nowadays，the safety problem is one of the most serious problems we have to care about，especially the students'safety．As a student，it is very important to know how to keep safe．We must obey the traffic rules and mustn't play on the street．We shouldn't eat too much junk food because it's bad for our health．We all like sports，but remember to do warm-up activities before doing sports and drink some water after that．When we are surfing the Internet，we can't tell strangers our personal information．Don't believe in strangers'words．We should learn to protect ourselves so that we stay away from danger．．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇提綱作文．內(nèi)容是以"How to Keep Safe？"為題，說說學(xué)生應(yīng)該如何保證自己的安全．時態(tài)主要為一般現(xiàn)在時．人稱主要為第一、三人稱．
寫作思路：考生需要首先審清主題，圍繞主題展開作文．
其次考生可從以下幾個方面展開作文，即本文的寫作要點：
1交通安全：遵守交通規(guī)則，不要在路上玩耍
2食品安全：不要吃太多垃圾食品
3運動安全：做熱身運動
4網(wǎng)絡(luò)安全：不要告訴陌生人自己的私人信息
5其他
常用到的重點短語：
obey rules 遵守規(guī)則
too much 太多
be bad for 對…不利
remember to do sth 記著去做某事
believe in 相信
stay away from 遠(yuǎn)離
【高分句型】
1．We shouldn't eat①too much junk food②because ③it's bad for our health．
①too much 太多
②because引導(dǎo)的原因狀語從句．
③be bad for 對…不利
2．We should ①learn to protect ourselves②so that we③stay away from danger．
①learn to do sth 學(xué)會做某事
②so that引導(dǎo)的目的狀語從句．
③stay away from 遠(yuǎn)離

解答 How to Keep Safe？
Every day we hear lots of traffic，food and some other safety problems．Nowadays，the safety problem is one of the most serious problems we have to care about，especially the students'safety．As a student，it is very important to know how to keep safe．We must obey the traffic rules and mustn't play on the street．（交通安全）We shouldn't eat too much junk food because it's bad for our health．【高分句型】（食品安全）We all like sports，but remember to do warm-up activities before doing sports and drink some water after that．（運動安全）When we are surfing the Internet，we can't tell strangers our personal information．（網(wǎng)絡(luò)安全）Don't believe in strangers'words．（其他：不要相信陌生人）We should learn to protect ourselves so that we stay away from danger．【高分句型】

點評 初中英語的作文，著重考察學(xué)生連詞成句的能力，要在"準(zhǔn)"字上下功夫．在寫作中注意人稱與謂語動詞的數(shù)關(guān)系和動詞時態(tài)等諸多方面．在對所出現(xiàn)的問題或是采取的措施描寫中注意使用連詞或是好的句式如have a  far-reaching effect on sth對…有深遠(yuǎn)的影響，only 置于句首的倒裝及only when …，can we…等．對于中學(xué)作文的寫作，盡量將所學(xué)的知識運用到作文中，寫出富于變化、結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊的文章，不要出現(xiàn)中式英文．在平時的練習(xí)中，注意多背誦范文，對于寫的好的句子進(jìn)行默寫，考試時就能寫出準(zhǔn)確地道的作文．