Question

【題目】書面表達(dá)(13分)

某英文網(wǎng)站提出“走路去上學(xué)”的倡議，請你就這一話題寫一篇約100詞的英語文章；內(nèi)容可包括：走路有利健康，和朋友結(jié)伴有利于……讓父母節(jié)省……使城市……等等，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮。

注意：文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)人名、校名等相關(guān)信息。

參考詞匯：be good for, with friends, save

Answer 1

【答案】

I think going to school on foot is good for us. First of all, walking to school is a wonderful way to exercise and it’s good for our health. Next, it’s fun to walk together with friends every day. We can talk about something interesting and know each other better. What’s more, if we walk, our parents won’t have to drive us to school. There will be fewer cars in the city. More walking and less driving help to make our city cleaner. The streets won’t be as crowded as they are now. I hope more and more students will go to school on foot.

【解析】

試題分析：這是一篇命題作文，一封倡議書。在要點(diǎn)中給出了寫作的大致方向，需要自己發(fā)揮的地方較多。動(dòng)筆前要先認(rèn)真閱讀要點(diǎn)，然后圍繞要點(diǎn)適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，確定時(shí)態(tài)主要詞匯等問題。寫作中，應(yīng)注意描述的全面性，盡量將提示的內(nèi)容利用上，為了讓表達(dá)更符合邏輯，可以適當(dāng)使用序數(shù)詞；語言的表述應(yīng)該符合語法的結(jié)構(gòu)，造句應(yīng)該符合英語的表達(dá)習(xí)慣。

寫作亮點(diǎn)：本文語言豐富，結(jié)構(gòu)嚴(yán)謹(jǐn)。用了大量的復(fù)合句：I think going to school on foot is good for us. What’s more, if we walk, our parents won’t have to drive us to school. There will be fewer cars in the city. I hope more and more students will go to school on foot.特別是First of all, Next, What’s more,的使用，使文章更加順暢，表達(dá)更符合邏輯。最后一句的倡議很有號召力，是一篇上等的佳作。