Question

7．假如這幅漫畫表現(xiàn)的是你經(jīng)歷的事情，請你根據(jù)所給提示描述事情經(jīng)過并談談你的看法．

提示詞：jaywalk vi．亂穿馬路；run the red light闖紅燈
注意：文中不能出現(xiàn)真實姓名和學校名．詞數(shù)80-100．
Friday afternoon，when I was on my way home from school，I saw a group of people jaywalking at the crossing．A volunteer tried to stop them，but no one listened to him．Instead，they ran the red light quickly．Just then，a bus came．One of them was nearly hit by the running bus．
In my opinion，jaywalking is a bad habit．It puts not only yourself but also other people in danger．I hope all of us should keep the traffic rules and stop running the red light．Look both sides/ways when you cross the road．．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇圖畫作文．內(nèi)容是請你根據(jù)漫畫所描述的事情經(jīng)過并談談你的看法．時態(tài)主要為一般現(xiàn)在時和一般過去時．人稱主要為第一、三人稱．
寫作思路：考生需要首先審清主題，圍繞主題展開作文．
其次考生可從以下幾個方面展開作文，即本文的寫作要點：
1．描述圖畫；一群人亂闖馬路，有人去阻止，不搭理，有一位差點被撞倒
2．我的看法；
 
常用到的重點短語：
on one's way to sp 某人去某地的路上
see sb doing sth 看見某人正在做某事
try to do sth 盡力做某事
not only…but also…不僅…而且…
in danger 處于危險中

【高分句型】
1．It puts①not only yourself but also other people②in danger．
①not only…but also…不僅…而且…
②in danger 處于危險中
2．I hope①all of us should keep the traffic rules and②stop running the red light．
①hope后是省略了引導詞that的賓語從句．
②stop doing sth 停止做某事
3．Look both sides/ways when you cross the road．
when引導的時間狀語從句

解答 Friday afternoon，when I was on my way home from school，I saw a group of people jaywalking at the crossing．A volunteer tried to stop them，but no one listened to him．Instead，they ran the red light quickly．Just then，a bus came．One of them was nearly hit by the running bus．（描述圖畫）
In my opinion，jaywalking is a bad habit．It puts not only yourself but also other people in danger．【高分句型】I hope all of us should keep the traffic rules and stop running the red light．【高分句型】Look both sides/ways when you cross the road【高分句型】（我的看法）

點評 這是一篇看圖作文．由于是描述過去的經(jīng)歷，故用一般過去時態(tài)，根據(jù)要求用第一人稱．
這篇短文層次分明，語言流暢，能把要點表達清楚．In my opinion，not only…but also等的應用給短文增色不少．