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（Ⅰ）今年3月，美國第一夫人米歇爾參觀北京師范大學(xué)第二附屬中學(xué)，眾多網(wǎng)友卻因該校同學(xué)們所穿的校服而在網(wǎng)上再度引爆“校服之爭”。請根據(jù)下面內(nèi)容提示，完成一篇短文。
贊成方：1. 校服有利于學(xué)生參加各種活動，尤其是體育活動。
2. 校服便宜，能替家長省錢。
3. 學(xué)生們不用每天浪費時間考慮應(yīng)該穿什么。
反對方：校服太丑了，顏色單一，偏大。
我的觀點：贊成在校期間穿校服，但是應(yīng)該提高校服的質(zhì)量。
參考詞匯：網(wǎng)友e-pal；活動activity；校服school uniform；質(zhì)量quality
注意：1. 詞數(shù)：80詞左右，短文的開頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)。
2. 覆蓋所有要點；可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，使行文連貫。
Ms Michelle Obama, the First Lady of the US, visited The Second High School Attached to Beijing Normal University on March, 2014. To our surprise, quite a lot of e-pals began to argue with each other about the school uniforms they were wearing……

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Ms. Michelle Obama, the First Lady of the US, visited The Second High School Attached to Beijing Normal University on March, 2014. To our surprise, quite a lot of e-pals began to argue with each other about the school uniforms they were wearing.
Some e-pals agree to wear uniforms at school. First, school uniforms are good for students to take part in different activities, especially sports. Second, school uniforms are cheaper, and they can save our parents’ money a lot. The most important thing is that students don’t have to waste time to think what they should wear every day. It is good for their study.
But some e-pals say that their school uniforms are too ugly. They have simple colors, and they are always too big for students.
In my opinion, I agree to wear school uniforms at school. But we should improve the quality of the school uniforms. Only in this way would more and more students like to wear school uniforms at school in the future.

試題分析：這篇作文要求我們對網(wǎng)上的校服之爭進(jìn)行描述。題目中給出了我們作文的背景，美國總統(tǒng)奧巴馬的夫人來到北京師范大學(xué)第二附屬中學(xué)參觀，網(wǎng)上的網(wǎng)友們卻對學(xué)生們的校服展開了不同的評論，引爆了“校服之爭”。我們需要用正確的英語將他們雙方的不同觀點表達(dá)出來，說明原因，在最后發(fā)表自己的看法。因此這篇短文的結(jié)構(gòu)是比較清楚的，可以分成三段來寫。第一段是題目中已經(jīng)給好的開頭，下面將贊成和反對的雙方觀點分成兩段具體描述，最后一段發(fā)表自己的觀點。注意分段可以使文章有層次，結(jié)構(gòu)清晰。寫作時，注意使用好的短語和連詞，使上下文的語句更有連貫性，表達(dá)起來更流暢。
【亮點說明】這是一篇優(yōu)秀的范文。文章中作者分成三段將題目中的內(nèi)容完整地表達(dá)了出來，層次清楚，結(jié)構(gòu)清晰。首先作者寫的是贊成穿校服的網(wǎng)友們的觀點，這一部分中好的句式有school uniforms are good for students to take part in different activities, especially sports，這一句中使用了短語be good for、take part in、especially等短語和詞匯；接下來作者寫了反對穿校服的網(wǎng)友們的觀點，They have simple colors, and they are always too big for students，這一段的表達(dá)中，作者主要使用了一些形容詞來描述；最后作者發(fā)表了自己的看法，開頭使用了短語in one’s opinion，非常合適；另外，這一段中還有一個倒裝句的使用，即Only in this way would more and more students like to wear school uniforms at school in the future.，這是一個比較好的句式。