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7．假如上周一你班舉行了"愛護水、節(jié)約水"的主題活動，請你根據(jù)以下要點為你校校報寫一篇活動報道．

活動內容	邀請王老師作報告；全班討論如何節(jié)水和愛護水．
活動收獲	我們知道我國一些地方水源受到污染；我市雖有一些河流和湖泊，但也缺水．所以…（節(jié)水和愛護水的方法至少各發(fā)揮一點）．
活動感受	…

要求：1．詞數(shù)不少于90，文章的開頭已為你寫好，不計人總詞數(shù)；
2．要點完整、層次清晰、語法正確、上下文連貫；
3．文中不得使用真實的人名、校名．
Last Monday we held an activityabout saving and protecting water．
Mr Wang was invited to give us a talk．After his speech，we had a discussion about how to save and protect water．
Now we know that some of the rivers are polluted in our country and that we are short of water although there are some rivers and lakes in our city．As a result，we need to protect and save water．For example，we shouldn't leave water running after using it．Besides，we mustn't throw rubbish into the rivers．
After taking part in the activity，we had a better understanding of the importance of protecting the environment and saving water．．

Answer 1

分析 本文是一篇圖表與提綱結合的作文，要求是假如上周一你班舉行了"愛護水、節(jié)約水"的主題活動，請你根據(jù)以下要點為你校校報寫一篇活動報道，也就是說體裁是新聞報道，寫作內容要包括：1．活動內容．2．活動收獲，其中在節(jié)水和愛護水的方法至少各發(fā)揮一點．3．活動感受，這一部分要求自我發(fā)揮，要寫完整．介紹活動內容時，要用第三人稱Mr Wang來寫，時態(tài)用一般過去時；活動收獲及感受時，用第一人稱we來寫，用一般現(xiàn)在時．

解答 Last Monday our class held an activity about saving and protecting water．
  Mr Wang was invited to give us a talk．After his speech，we had a discussion about how to save and protect water．
  Now we know that some of the rivers are polluted in our country and that we are short of water although there are some rivers and lakes in our city．As a result，we need to protect and save water．For example，we shouldn't leave water running after using it．Besides，we mustn't throw rubbish into the rivers．
  After taking part in the activity，we had a better understanding of the importance of protecting the environment and saving
water．

點評 這是一篇給材料作文，短文的開頭已經給出，本作文中給出的要點比較簡略，其中需要自己發(fā)揮的地方較多，可用到We shouldn't leave water running after using it．We mustn't throw rubbish into the rivers．等句式．寫作時注意準確運用時態(tài)，當介紹活動內容時，時態(tài)用一般過去時；介紹活動收獲及感受時，用一般現(xiàn)在時．為保證上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關系，可以使用After his speech，As a result，After taking part in the activity，等短語，讓文章更有層次．