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4．雷鋒同志說過："我要把有限的生命，投入到無限的為人民服務之中去．"請以"Everyone Needs Help"為題，寫一篇作文．

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Everyone Needs Help
In our daily life，we will meet different kinds of people，no matter at home，in school，or at some otherplaces．Everyone needs help，I think．I got much help from my parents，myfriends，my teachers，my classmates and so on，even some strangers．Forexample，my parents often help me wash clothes，my teachers often give me helpin learning．At the same time，I also help others．I help my parents put awayour clothes，I lend something to my classmates．It's happy to help others．Weshould help each other．I tell you a story．
One day I saw a little girl in the street carrying aheavy schoolbag on her back．She was walking happily．Then suddenly an old manfell down while he was crossing a street．She ran towards him at once，but shewas too short to help him to stand．I helped her and we together brought theold man to safety．He thanked us over and over．I think the little girl was，though very young，a very warm-hearted person．．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇提綱作文．內容是以"Everyone Needs Help"為題通過親身經(jīng)歷說說雷鋒精神．時態(tài)主要為一般現(xiàn)在時和一般過去時．人稱主要為第一、三人稱．
寫作思路：考生需要首先審清主題，圍繞主題展開作文．
其次考生可從以下幾個方面展開作文，即本文的寫作要點：
1別人幫助過你嗎？
2你幫助過別人嗎？
3一次經(jīng)歷
常用到的重點短語：
help sb do sth 幫某人做某事
at the same time 同時
lend sth to sb 借某物給某人
too…to do sth太…而不能…
【高分句型】
1．Then suddenly an old man①fell down ②while he was crossing a street．
①fall down 摔倒
②while引導的時間狀語從句表過去的動作正在進行中．
2．She ran towards him ①at once，but she was ②too short to③help him to stand．
①at once立刻 馬上
②too…to do sth太…而不能…
③help sb  to do sth 幫某人做某事

解答 Everyone Needs Help
 In our daily life，we will meet different kinds of people，no matter at home，in school，or at some other places．Everyone needs help，I think．I got much help from my parents，myfriends，my teachers，my classmates and so on，even some strangers．For example，my parents often help me wash clothes，my teachers often give me help in learning．（別人幫助過我）At the same time，I also help others．I help my parents put away our clothes，I lend something to my classmates．（我?guī)椭�過別人）It's happy to help others．We should help each other．I tell you a story．
One day I saw a little girl in the street carrying a heavy schoolbag on her back．She was walking happily．Then suddenly an old man fell down while he was crossing a street．【高分句型】She ran towards him at once，but she was too short to help him to stand．【高分句型】I helped her and we together brought the old man to safety．He thanked us over and over．I think the little girl was，though very young，a very warm-hearted person．（一次經(jīng)歷）

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