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13．假如你是光明中學(xué)高一學(xué)生李明，澳大利亞環(huán)保協(xié)會組織一次為期兩周的"澳大利亞生態(tài)游"活動，作為一名環(huán)保志愿者，希望得到這次機會．請按以下提示向該組織寫一封申請信：
1．個人情況介紹（如性格，業(yè)余愛好，語言優(yōu)勢等）
2．申請理由（參觀野生動物自然保護區(qū)，了解澳大利亞環(huán)保情況）
3．對本次活動的期待…
注意：1．字?jǐn)?shù)100字左右，信的開頭和結(jié)尾已給出．（不記入總字?jǐn)?shù)）
2．可適當(dāng)加入細(xì)節(jié)，使內(nèi)容充實，行文連貫．
Dear Sir，
I feel delighted to know that Australian Environmental Council will host a two-week eco-tour to Australia．As an environmental volunteer，I                       

Answer 1

分析 本題是一篇書信類作文，主要的要求有：1．個人情況介紹（如性格，業(yè)余愛好，語言優(yōu)勢等）2．申請理由（參觀野生動物自然保護區(qū)，了解澳大利亞環(huán)保情況）3．對本次活動的期待…需要注意：1．字?jǐn)?shù)100字左右，信的開頭和結(jié)尾已給出．（不記入總字?jǐn)?shù)） 2．可適當(dāng)加入細(xì)節(jié)，使內(nèi)容充實，行文連貫．
亮點說明：本題運用了多段描寫的方式，寫出了文章所需要的要點．用了一般現(xiàn)在時，現(xiàn)在完成時，一般過去時等時態(tài)，條理清楚，表達(dá)簡潔不啰嗦．是一篇不錯的文章，而且錯誤很少．
As an environmental volunteer，I sincerely want to take part in this activity and introduce myself as follows：（高分句型）
What interests me most is eco-tour．I have taken part in many activities，which give me a deep impression．（高分句型）
And I hope I'll have the chance to pay a visit to the wildlife nature reserves and have a better understanding of environment protection（高分句型）．

解答 I feel delighted to know that Australian Environmental Council will host a two-week eco-tour to Australia．As an environmental volunteer，I sincerely want to take part in this activity and introduce myself as follows：（高分句型）
   I'm a senior one student，studying in Guangming High School．I'm an easy-going and hard-working boy．What interests me most is eco-tour．I have taken part in many activities，which give me a deep impression．（高分句型）At the same time I can speak English fluently and can easily communicate with local people．
    The aim to apply for this activity is to understand how to develop eco-tour in Australia．And I hope I'll have the chance to pay a visit to the wildlife nature reserves and have a better understanding of environment protection（高分句型）．I'm sure I will benefit a lot from this two-week eco-tour．I'd appreciate it if you can take my application into consideration．
   Look forward to hearing your reply．
                                                          Yours，
                                                            Li Ming

點評 應(yīng)該注意適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)以使行文連貫，比如適當(dāng)選用表示因果、遞進、轉(zhuǎn)折關(guān)系的連接詞，使文章流暢、通順，并避免因反復(fù)使用句式相同的簡單句而造成的單調(diào)感．（1）認(rèn)真審題，確定體裁． （2）構(gòu)思要點．根據(jù)題目要求，理解要表達(dá)的要點．設(shè)計好文章的層次段落，考慮所用時態(tài)、人稱等，把要點串聯(lián)起來，構(gòu)成文章框架．（3）選詞造句，避難選易．（4）認(rèn)真檢查，避免錯誤．仔細(xì)閱讀全文，查找是否有錯，注意時態(tài)、單詞拼寫、字母大小寫、標(biāo)點是否有誤，句式是否正確．邏輯是否一致．