Question

假如你是Jay，你的好友Jack因兩次考試成績不理想而煩惱, 發(fā)來e-mail向你傾訴。請根據(jù)下列內(nèi)容寫一封e-mail作為答復(fù)。
1.不必沮喪，認(rèn)真分析(analyze)失敗原因。
2．增強(qiáng)自信心，避免犯同樣的錯誤。
3．失敗是成功之母，只要努力而不放棄，遲早會成功的。
要求：1.適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)2.不要逐字翻譯。3. 字?jǐn)?shù)120左右。
Dear Jack,
I’ve received your e-mail and know that you are in a bad mood now.                                                                                       
                                                                              
                                                                              
                                                                              
                                                                              
                                                                              
                                                                              

Answer 1

One possible version:
Dear Jack,
I’ve received your e-mail and know that you are in bad mood now. However, I don’t think it’s necessary for you to be so disappointed for failing twice. You see, we will face many more exams in the future even if we leave school! So try the follow:
Collect the mistakes you made in the exams or in the exercises you did before, and analyse them.carefully. Try to avoid making them again in the next exam. Make good preparations and be confident.
As is known to us all, failure is the mother of success. Let every failure be your stepping stone. If you try your best and never give up, you are sure to succed in time.
Yours,
Jay

試題分析：本文是篇材料作文，材料非常簡單，學(xué)生很容易把握寫作要求和寫作目的。考生在寫作之前必須認(rèn)真審題，首先要注意文章的時態(tài)，要求是你的好友Jack因兩次考試成績不理想而煩惱, 發(fā)來e-mail向你傾訴，你回復(fù)1.不必沮喪，認(rèn)真分析(analyze)失敗原因。 2．增強(qiáng)自信心，避免犯同樣的錯誤。3．失敗是成功之母，只要努力而不放棄，遲早會成功的。因此本文必須用第一、二人稱適當(dāng)變化。要用鼓勵和建議的句式。注意不要根據(jù)材料逐字逐句地翻譯，應(yīng)該注意句子的銜接，以提高作文的檔次。
【亮點(diǎn)說明】文中使用了非常好的短語和句子為文章增色不少，比如be confident，failure is the mother of success，whenever，in time，等等。并注意了句子的銜接如：So， However，You see，As is known to us all 等等。