Question

20．假如你是一名失學(xué)兒童，名叫李華，你有幸得到在中國工作的Mr．Brown 的資助，可以重返校園．請你給Mr．Brown寫一封信，內(nèi)容如下：
1．收到錢和書后能重返校園，非常感激．
2．在老師的幫助下，學(xué)習(xí)有了很大的進(jìn)步，受到老師的表揚和鼓勵．決心更加努力學(xué)習(xí)，取得更大的進(jìn)步．
3．盼望見到Mr．Brown，希望他寄來一張照片．
詞數(shù)：100字左右．
適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇提綱類作文，我們需要用正確的英語把給出的要點表達(dá)出來．動筆前，一定要認(rèn)真分析要點，理解要點要表達(dá)的含義，不能遺漏要點，跑題偏題．本作文中給出的要點比較具體，故需要準(zhǔn)確表達(dá)．寫作時注意準(zhǔn)確運用時態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系，盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時也要注意使用高級詞匯和高級句型使文章顯得更有檔次．特別注意在選擇句式時要賦予變化．平時除了加強詞匯積累，寫作聯(lián)系以外，還可以適當(dāng)記憶一些類似的范文，這樣在考試中可以起到事半功倍的效果．
【亮點說明】范文中出現(xiàn)一些常見的短語：return to 返回某處； make great progress取得進(jìn)步； with the help of 在某人幫助下；made up my mind to下定決心做某事； get on with與某人相處如何； have no opportunity to do 沒有機會做某事．I have been working hard since I went back to school．這句話中考查現(xiàn)在完成時．But for your help，I might have left school and couldn't have got such a good education．這句話中運用對過去的虛擬語氣．I have made up my mind to study harder and make greater progress這個句子運用兩個比較級，前后相互呼應(yīng)．
I have been working hard since I went back to school．（高分句型一）
But for your help，I might have left school and couldn't have got such a good education．（高分句型二）
I have made up my mind to study harder and make greater progress．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Mr．Brown，
　    I am writing to express my deepest gratitude for the money and books you sent me．I could not have returned to school without your help．Thank you so much．
       I have been working hard since I went back to school．（高分句型一） I have made great progress in my studies with the help of my teachers．They often praise me and encourage me．But for your help，I might have left school and couldn't have got such a good education．（高分句型二）I have made up my mind to study harder and make greater progress．（高分句型三）
      How are you getting on with your life and work？I would like to meet you in person，but I have no opportunity to do so．Would you please send me a photo of yourself？
      Thank you again for your generous help and best wishes!
                                                                                                                                                                                                     Yours Sincerely，
                                                                                                                                                                                                       Li Hua

點評 英語寫作是一項主觀性較強的測試題．它不僅考查學(xué)生的寫作基礎(chǔ)而且還考查學(xué)生在寫作過程中綜合運用語言的能力．在撰寫時要注意主謂語一致，時態(tài)呼應(yīng)，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓(xùn)練：一是語言基礎(chǔ)方面的訓(xùn)練，要有扎實的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識和能力 方面的訓(xùn)練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．