Question

5．假設你是李華，你所在城市的交通擁擠問題日趨嚴重，交通事故時有發(fā)生，特別是在上下班高峰時段．請根據(jù)以下提示，用英語給市政府寫一封信，反映交通狀況并提出自己的建議．
提示：1．反映交通狀況；
2．提出改善建議；
3．希望和祝福．
注意：1．可適當增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫；
2．詞數(shù)100左右；
3．信的開頭和結(jié)尾已經(jīng)為你寫好，不計入總詞數(shù)．
Dear Sir/Madam，
I'm writing to reflect the traffic situation of our city．
                                                                                        
Yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書面表達屬于提綱類作文，根據(jù)提示信息假設你是李華，你所在城市的交通擁擠問題日趨嚴重，交通事故時有發(fā)生，特別是在上下班高峰時段．請根據(jù)以下提示，用英語給市政府寫一封信，反映交通狀況并提出自己的建議．寫作時注意以下幾點：1、仔細閱讀有關提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，明確幾個要點：反映交通狀況；提出改善建議；希望和祝福2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進行分析、構思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關系來寫．本文寫作時可以按照要點所給的順序?qū)懀?、根據(jù)要表達的內(nèi)容確定句子的時態(tài)、語態(tài)．4．注意使用高級詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點．
【亮點說明】本文結(jié)構緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達：
要點一：眾所周知，我市的交通問題正變得越來越嚴重，尤其是高峰時段．
As is known to us，the traffic problem in our city is becoming more and more serious，especially during the rush hours．（as引導非限制性定語從句）
要點二：每天很多車在路上行駛．
Many cars are running on the roads every day．
要點三：其中的一些車況不好的車輛在路上運行，司機很難通過．
Some of them are in bad condition and it is difficult for the drivers to go across．
要點四：我認為到了我們市政府必須采取有效措施來解決這一問題的時候了．
It's high time that the city government took some effective measures to solve the  problem．
要點五：首先，很多路需要加寬修繕．
Firstly，many roads need to be widened and repaired．
要點六：其次，我們需要修建立交橋（overpass）來緩解交通堵塞．
Secondly，we need to build overpasses so as to cut down traffic jams．
要點七：需要嚴格控制私家車的數(shù)量．
The number of private cars must be strictly controlled．
要點八：只要采取上述措施，我相信交通問題會得到解決，交通事故會得到控制．
As long as we take the above measures，I'm sure the traffic problem will be  solved and the traffic accidents will be controlled．
要點九：我希望政府會接受我的建議．
I hope our government will accept my suggestions．
句式升級一：用what引導主語從句改寫要點一
What is known to us is that the traffic problem in our city is becoming more and more serious，especially during the rush hours．
句式升級二：用"some of which"引導的定語從句連接要點二、三
Many cars are running on the roads every day，some of which are in bad condition and it is difficult for the drivers to go across．
句式升級三：用do強調(diào)要點九
I do hope our government will accept my suggestions．

解答 Dear Sir/Madam，
       I'm writing to reflect the traffic situation of our city．
       What is known to us is that the traffic problem in our city is becoming more and more serious，especially during the rush hours．（高分句型一）Many cars are running on the roads every day，some of which are in bad condition and it is difficult for the drivers to go across．It's high time that the city government took some effective measures to solve the problem．（高分句型二）Firstly，many roads need to be widened and repaired．Secondly，we need to build overpasses so as to cut down traffic jams．Thirdly，the number of private cars must be strictly controlled．
       As long as we take the above measures，I'm sure the traffic problem will be solved and the traffic accidents will be controlled．（高分句型三）And I do hope our government will accept my suggestions．
                                                                                                                                                                                                     Yours，
                                                                                                                                                                                                    Li Hua

點評 英語寫作是一項主觀性較強的測試題．它不僅考查學生的寫作基礎而且還考查學生在寫作過程中綜合運用語言的能力．在撰寫時要注意主謂語一致，時態(tài)呼應，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓練：一是語言基礎方面的訓練，要有扎實的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識和能力 方面的訓練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．