Question

7．閱讀下面的短文，然后按照要求寫一篇150詞左右的英文短文．
Every morning，on his way to work，Mike passed an old man who was always at the same place with a cup in his hand hoping to get a bit of change from those who passed by．For most people，this person was someone to be ignored as if he didn't exist，someone who they didn't want to be bothered with．However，Mike would always say good morning to him and wish him a nice day and sometimes would drop a dollar or two in his cup．This behavior went on for several years until one day before retirement．
He told the man that he would no longer pass by because it was his last day on the job．The man took his hand and shook it warmly saying that he had always looked forward to seeing Mike not because he dropped a few dollars in his cup．He said he would miss him because he was one of the few people who said hello and bid him good day．The man also said that his warm words always brightened his day and helped him to continue．
We all have power of words and we often do not recognize that some can be devastating（毀滅性的） while some can be encouraging．
【寫作內(nèi)容】
1．以約30個(gè)詞概括上文的主要內(nèi)容；
2．然后以約120個(gè)詞就言語的力量的話題發(fā)表你的看法，并包括以下要點(diǎn)：
（1）你對上文中Mike的做法持什么看法；
（2）談?wù)勅粘Ｉ�活中言語的力量；
（3）以你或他人的經(jīng)歷舉例論證言語的力量．
【寫作要求】
1．在作文中可以使用自己親身的經(jīng)歷或虛構(gòu)的故事，也可以參照閱讀材料的內(nèi)容，但不得直接引用原文中的句子；
2．作文中不能出現(xiàn)真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校名稱．
【評分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)】
概括準(zhǔn)確，語言規(guī)范，內(nèi)容合適，篇章連貫．

Answer 1

分析 高分句型：
句型一：
I couldn't agree more （1）with what Mike did for the old man（2）．我非常贊成Mike為老人所做的一切．
（1）can't agree more非常贊成；該句型運(yùn)用了"否定詞+比較級"表示"最高級"．
（2）what Mike did for the old man 為介詞with后接的賓語從句；從句往往是書面表達(dá)中的高分句型．
句型二：
It is necessary that（1）we should pay attention to what we say（2）since it is like a double-edged sword（2）．我們應(yīng)該關(guān)注我們所說的話，既然它就像一把雙刃劍．
（1）It is necessary that.."有必要…"，．往往用來表達(dá)作者的倡議，為it做形式主語，that引導(dǎo)的主語從句，從句中的動(dòng)詞為（should）+動(dòng)詞原形；
（2）what we say為介詞to后接的賓語從句；
（3）a double-edged sword 雙刃劍
句型三：
So depressed did I feel that（1）I did not feel like talking（2）to anyone at all．我覺得如此沮喪以致我不想與任何人說話．
（1）so…that表示"如此…以致"，其中so放在句首，句中用部分倒裝；
（2）feel like doing想做…

解答 Every day Mike said hello and sometimes gave one dollar or two to an old man who was begging for a bit of change．His words encouraged the old man to continue his hard life．（30詞概括）
I couldn't agree more with what Mike did for the old man【高分句型一】．Words have such great power that they can influence people greatly，either devastating or encouraging（我對Mike行為的看法）．
Words have magic power over people．A few warm words may brighten a day while just a hurtful sentence may leave a deep scar in a fragile heart．In our daily life，It is necessary that we should pay attention to what we say since it is like a double-edged sword【高分句型二】（日常生活中言語的力量）．
I also experienced the power of words．It was a time when I failed in the first exam at senior high school．So depressed did I feel that I did not feel like talking to anyone at all【高分句型三】．Yet after class my teacher Mr．Wang invited me to his office and said smilingly to me，"I hope you will not be defeated by temporary failure．Pick up your courage and prove that you are the best next time，will you？"All of a sudden，my world was brightened by his inspiring words．It seemed as if a stream of warmth flowed into my heart and instantly I was filled with energy and ambition to fight again．（舉例論證言語的力量）

點(diǎn)評 寫作時(shí)首先審題要到位：審體裁、人稱和時(shí)態(tài)；審要點(diǎn)．其次要考慮高分詞語和句型的選用，從句、非謂語動(dòng)詞、倒裝、強(qiáng)調(diào)句型等都是可考慮的高級句型；詞語和句型的選用要包含作者的感情色彩和增強(qiáng)表達(dá)的氣勢；再次，運(yùn)用關(guān)聯(lián)詞如besides、what's  more、moreover、for one thing …for another等，使文字更加流暢．