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16．感恩，是我們生活中永恒的話題．學(xué)會(huì)感恩，我們將會(huì)感受到更多快樂(lè)．假如你校擬舉行一次有關(guān)"感恩"的演講比賽，請(qǐng)你根據(jù)以下要點(diǎn)寫一篇英語(yǔ)演講稿．要點(diǎn)如下：
1．感恩對(duì)象（父母、老師、朋友）； 2．為何感謝他\她；  3．你想如何感謝他\她
【注意】：（1）只能選擇一個(gè)感恩對(duì)象；
（2）可對(duì)所有要點(diǎn)作適當(dāng)發(fā)揮；
（3）演講稿中不得提及所在的學(xué)校、本人姓名和感恩對(duì)象的姓名；
（4）詞數(shù)100-120左右，開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾已寫好，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)．
Good afternoon，everyone!It's a great honour to have the opportunity to be with you today．The topic of my speech is"Thank you，                             
Thank you for listening．

Answer 1

分析 題目要求根據(jù)所給要點(diǎn)寫一篇關(guān)于"感恩"的演講稿．寫作要點(diǎn)包括：說(shuō)明要感恩的對(duì)象；感謝他的原因；打算怎樣感謝他/她．注意只能選擇一個(gè)對(duì)象，可以進(jìn)行適當(dāng)?shù)耐卣梗徊坏锰岬綄W(xué)校、自己和感恩對(duì)象的姓名；不要出現(xiàn)標(biāo)點(diǎn)和拼寫錯(cuò)誤，盡量保持卷面整潔、字體美觀；注意行文的連貫性．
亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明：
范文使用了固定句型It's a great honour to have the opportunity to be with you today．；定語(yǔ)從句who offers me her unconditional love，who cares about us so much；讓步狀語(yǔ)從句whenever I get upset；時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句until I cheer up等語(yǔ)法知識(shí)，使作文的寫作水平得到提供；
范文使用了較多的高級(jí)詞匯：ordinary，highly，appreciate，consideration，caring等，使作文的檔次得到了提升，表達(dá)更生動(dòng)；
范文使用了較多的短語(yǔ)和固定搭配：keeps me company；Above all；listens to；in return；either…or等，充實(shí)了作文的內(nèi)容；
范文還注意使用Above all，Actually，So，F(xiàn)or me等銜接句子和段落，使作文顯得連貫、緊湊．

解答 Good afternoon，everyone!It's a great honour to have the opportunity to be with you today．The topic of my speech is"Thank you，mum．"
My life has been blessed with a mother who offers me her unconditional love．（高分句型）My mum is an ordinary housewife．I highly appreciate her kind consideration．She often keeps me company，cooks tasty dinners for me and makes my room clean．Above all，whenever I get upset，she listens to me and comforts me until I cheer up．（高分句型）I'm fortunate to have such a caring mother．
Actually，all of us have someone who cares about us so much．So do not forget to show our love in return．（高分句型）For me，either a small talk with Mum or a cup of tea for her will make her happy．

點(diǎn)評(píng) 應(yīng)該注意適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)以使行文連貫，比如適當(dāng)選用表示因果、遞進(jìn)、轉(zhuǎn)折關(guān)系的連接詞，使文章流暢、通順，并避免因反復(fù)使用句式相同的簡(jiǎn)單句而造成的單調(diào)感．（1）認(rèn)真審題，確定體裁． （2）構(gòu)思要點(diǎn)．根據(jù)題目要求，理解要表達(dá)的要點(diǎn)．設(shè)計(jì)好文章的層次段落，考慮所用時(shí)態(tài)、人稱等，把要點(diǎn)串聯(lián)起來(lái)，構(gòu)成文章框架．（3）選詞造句，避難選易．（4）認(rèn)真檢查，避免錯(cuò)誤．仔細(xì)閱讀全文，查找是否有錯(cuò)，注意時(shí)態(tài)、單詞拼寫、字母大小寫、標(biāo)點(diǎn)是否有誤，句式是否正確．邏輯是否一致．