Question

20．假如你叫李華，今年暑假即將跨入高三的學習，壓力很大，想和父母說說心里話，請你用英文在你的博客上用書信形式表達出來．主要內容如下：
知心話感恩感謝父母的關心、鼓勵
對父母的期望1．多加交流
2．適時提供幫助
學習打算考生自擬（至少寫兩點）
注意：1．短文必須包括所有內容要點，可適當發(fā)揮．
2．詞數(shù)：120左右（開頭與結尾已給出，不計入詞數(shù)）．
Dear Mom and Dad，
With the Senior Three approaching，I really hope to have a heart-to-heart talk with you!
                                             
Mom and Dad，I am quite confident about my future．Wish you good health and a happy life．
Yours sincerely，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本文的屬于提綱類寫作，要求對父母說說心里話，話題切合考生實際，與考生的生活非常貼近，考生有話可說，有很強的可寫性．要點是以提綱的形式給出的，要求考生有較強的整合能力，在寫作時充分利用連接詞，高級句型和詞匯，如果可能在文章結尾運用諺語，以使文章的層次更高．應該用合適的連接詞，可以適當使用高級的句式和高級的詞匯來給文章增色．
【亮點說明】范文使用了很多詞組：Thanks to 多虧，making remarkable progress 取得很大的進步，made up my mind to 決定，make every effort to study努力學習，the key to…的關鍵． 還使用了不少精典句式，如：Since it will be less than one month before the exam，I'm under great pressure now．這句話使用了固定句型，I would appreciate it if you can have a frequent talk with me and provide me with timely help，which contributes to my staying in a good state．這句話使用了it做形式賓語和which引導的定語從句，I am fully aware of the responsibilities I am shouldering．這句話使用了定語從句，Meanwhile，I will spare some time to participate in sports activities，aiming to build up my body and free myself from the heavy work of studies這句話使用了現(xiàn)在分詞做狀語．文章還恰當?shù)厥褂昧怂渍Z：Just as the saying goes，"no pains，no gains．"．

解答 Dear Mom and Dad，
      Entering Senior Three，I really hope to have a heart-to-heart talk with you!During the years，I always feel grateful for your unselfish care and love．Thanks to your constant encouragement，I have been making remarkable progress in my study．（高分句型一）Since it will be less than one month before the exam，I'm under great pressure now．I would appreciate it if you can have a frequent talk with me and provide me with timely help，which contributes to my staying in a good state．（高分句型二）
    I am fully aware of the responsibilities I am shouldering．I have made up my mind to make every effort to study，for I believe hard work is the key to success．Just as the saying goes，"no pains，no gains．"Meanwhile，I will spare some time to participate in sports activities，aiming to build up my body and free myself from the heavy load of studies．（高分句型三） Mom and Dad，I am quite confident about my future．
    Wish you good health and a happy life．
                                                                                                  Yours sincerely，
                                                                                                    Li Hua

點評 英語寫作是一項主觀性較強的測試題．它不僅考查學生的寫作基礎而且還考查學生在寫作過程中綜合運用語言的能力．在撰寫時要注意主謂語一致，時態(tài)呼應，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓練：一是語言基礎方面的訓練，要有扎實的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識和能力 方面的訓練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．