Question

10．假如你是李華．最近，你校舉辦了一次"成長記錄袋"展示活動，請你結合下列內容，給你的筆友Peter寫一封電子郵件，介紹這項活動，并談談你的感受．
時間/地點：2012年3月9日下午4：30-6：00．學校展廳．
活動主題：促進學生的發(fā)展．
活動要求：每班選出10個優(yōu)秀"成長記錄袋"參展．記錄袋內容包括：
1．學生作品或成績；2．成長過程記錄；3．評價或感想．
活動內容：1．全體學生觀看展覽；2．評委現(xiàn)場打分決定名次．
注意：
1．詞數(shù)100左右；
2．可適當增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫；
3．信件格式已為你給出．
參考詞匯：成長記錄袋portfolio（s）；評價assessment；評委judge
Dear Peter，
      ．
Yourself sincerely，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 高分句型一：
Those who received the highest scores were awarded by our school．
高分句型二：
The activity，thought highly of by all the studengts and teachers，provides a platform for studengts to the display their talents and achievemengts，allowing other studengts to leam．
句型一 who received the highest scores were awarded by our school． 該句是一個由Who引導的定語從句
句型二 ①thought highly of by all the studengts and teachers 該部分為插入語，對主語進行補充說明
            ②allowing other studengts to leam 該部分使用了現(xiàn)在分詞短語作伴隨狀語
句型一和二的使用使得整篇作文更有層次感，更能很好的將文意表達．

解答 Dear Peter，
     I am writing to tell you about an exhibition in our school．（說明原因）The exhibition of portfolios was held in the Exhibition Hall of our school from 4：00 to 6：00 on the afternoon of March 9，2012．It was to promle students'development by viewing their-made portfolios．Each class selected 10 best portpfolios participate．A variety of things involevd in students'growth were in the portfoilos，such as pictures of their art works and prizes，some meaningfuil materials in the process of their reflection，etc．After all the students and judges finished watching the portfolios，the judges scored each participant on the spot．Those who received the highest scores were awarded by our school．（高分句型一）
The activity，thought highly of by all the studengts and teachers，provides a platform for studengts to the display their talents and achievemengts，allowing other studengts to leam．（高分句型二）The portfolios witness the students'growing experiences，which is beneficial to their development．
      Best wishes!
                                                                                                                               Yours
                                                                                                                               Li Hua

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