Question

7．如圖是你校2009年在水電、學(xué)生用紙、學(xué)生伙食人均費(fèi)用與2008年比較的增長(zhǎng)情況．從圖表中看出，你校2009年學(xué)生的某些行為與哥本哈根世界氣候大會(huì)及我國(guó)今年三月份"兩會(huì)"倡導(dǎo)的"低碳、節(jié)能"不太相符．請(qǐng)你針對(duì)你校的情況，寫一篇英語(yǔ)短文，發(fā)表在本校校園網(wǎng)絡(luò)論壇上，告訴大家如何節(jié)能減排、建立"低碳"校園．

注意：
1．詞數(shù)100左右；
2．短文的開頭已為你寫好，不計(jì)入詞數(shù)；
3．內(nèi)容可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，使行文連貫．
From the chart above，we can see that            ．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇應(yīng)用文，讓考生描述圖表，提出"低碳"的倡議．寫作時(shí)可分為三部分：闡述現(xiàn)象，描述圖表為第一段，分別說(shuō)明水電、紙張、伙食的增長(zhǎng)情況；第二段說(shuō)明原因，提出解決措施；第三段提出倡議．描述圖表時(shí)采用第三人稱，闡述觀點(diǎn)的部分使用第一人稱．全篇時(shí)態(tài)使用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)．
重點(diǎn)短語(yǔ)及句型：
build a"low-carbon school"建立"低碳校園"
form the habit of 養(yǎng)成…的習(xí)慣
saving water and electricity節(jié)約水電
turn off關(guān)閉
reduce food waste減少食物浪費(fèi)
save energy節(jié)約能源
From the chart above，we can see that the cost of food，paper，water and electricity increased by 10%，8% and 15% in 2009．
從表格中我們可以看出，2009年食物、紙張、水電的消耗分別增長(zhǎng)了10%，8%和15%．
Never leave water running unnecessarily while brushing our teeth and washing hands．
刷牙和洗手的時(shí)候永遠(yuǎn)不要讓水一直流．
If we all do like this，I am sure our school will become more and more beautiful．
如果我們能這樣做，我確定我們的學(xué)校將會(huì)越來(lái)越美麗．

解答 參考答案：
    From the chart above，we can see that the cost of food，paper，water and electricity increased by 10%，8% and 15% in 2009．（描述現(xiàn)象）As high school students，what should we do to build a"low-carbon school"in the future？（提出問(wèn)題）I think we must do as follows：
    Firstly，we should form the habit of saving water and electricity．Never leave water running unnecessarily while brushing our teeth and washing hands．Meanwhile，whenever we leave classrooms or our dormitories，make sure that the lights are turned off．（措施一）Secondly，we should also save every piece of paper as well as other materials by writing on both sides of the paper or using materials to be recycled．（措施二）Thirdly，in order to reduce food waste，we should get our meals according to how much we can have．Besides，we should often offer to remind our schoolmates to save energy．（措施三）
    If we all do like this，I am sure our school will become more and more beautiful．（提出倡議）

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