Question

【題目】假如你是某外國(guó)語學(xué)校高二學(xué)生李華。近來，你發(fā)現(xiàn)很多同學(xué)課間休息時(shí)間坐在教室里學(xué)習(xí)。請(qǐng)你根據(jù)以下提示，用英語寫信給校長(zhǎng)反映這一問題，并呼吁同學(xué)們注意學(xué)習(xí)效率。

1. 反映問題；

2. 你的建議(至少兩點(diǎn))。

3. 總結(jié)文章并提出希望

注意：

1. 詞數(shù)100左右；

2. 文中不得提及人名、校名及地名；

3. 信的開頭已為你寫好（不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)）。

(ten-minute break between classes)課間休息

Dear Sir,

I am Li Hua, a senior 2 student in your school. I’m writing to tell you about a problem.

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Answer 1

【答案】Dear Sir,

I am Li Hua, a senior 2 student in your school. I’m writing to tell you about a problem. At present, many students stay in the classroom to study during the ten-minute break between classes.

In my opinion, it is very important to take a break between classes. Otherwise students will feel tired both physically and mentally. During the ten-minute break, we can do something to get rid of tiredness. What we need is to have a real rest, instead of getting more exhausted. So relaxation in that period is really of great benefit to us.

As far as I’m concerned, to study effectively, we should combine our study with amusement; meanwhile, doing some sports is also a good way. As an old saying goes, “All work and no play makes Jack a dull boy.” Only in this way will we be able to study effectively.

Yours sincerely,

Li Hua

【解析】【名師點(diǎn)評(píng)】

本文屬于提綱作文，本文只給出了一個(gè)話題，關(guān)于課間很多學(xué)生都在認(rèn)真學(xué)習(xí)而不愿意休息。你認(rèn)為這種做法是不明智的，因?yàn)檎n間就是讓學(xué)生休息調(diào)整的，如果課間不休息，會(huì)大大影響上課的效率，反而是得不償失。你的建議是不僅僅課間要休息，而且還要好好休息。

提綱作文難度在于謀篇布局，要根據(jù)題目要求作出合理的布局分段，在寫作時(shí)要注意語法規(guī)則的合理運(yùn)用，要選擇合適的高級(jí)詞匯和連接詞讓文章成為整體，變換使用多種句型，讓文章更有變化。

本文亮點(diǎn)：本文首先亮出自己要反映的問題即本文的話題“At present, many students stay in the classroom to study during the ten-minute break between classes.”接著在第二段就此提出自己的看法“In my opinion, it is very important to take a break between classes. Otherwise students will feel tired both physically and mentally”用一個(gè)轉(zhuǎn)折詞“Otherwise”說明了問題的嚴(yán)重性。接著用一個(gè)單句和一個(gè)名詞從從句“What we need is to have a real rest, instead of getting more exhausted.”再次強(qiáng)調(diào)課間休息的必要性，最終用一個(gè)“so ”結(jié)束第二段。最后一段用一個(gè)高級(jí)詞匯“As far as I’m concerned,”再次重申自己的觀點(diǎn)“to study effectively, we should combine our study with amusement; meanwhile, doing some sports is also a good way.”用一個(gè)分句使用了兩個(gè)非謂語（to study effectively，doing some sports）讓句式更豐富。再用一個(gè)由“as”引導(dǎo)的非限制性定語從句“As an old saying goes, “All work and no play makes Jack a dull boy.”引出一句習(xí)語“只工作不玩耍，聰明的孩子也變傻”。結(jié)尾用一個(gè)由“only”引起的一個(gè)倒裝句“Only in this way will we be able to study effectively.”完美地結(jié)束。文章單句與復(fù)句交替使用，整個(gè)文章一氣呵成，體現(xiàn)了對(duì)英語的駕駛能力。