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4．假定你是李華，是校報小記者．請你為校報寫一篇英語短文，介紹最近在我國很多城市發(fā)生的霧霾天氣．請參考以下要點：
（1）危害：阻礙交通，危害健康
（2）原因：空氣污染
（3）如何自我防護：霧霾天氣早晚少開窗戶；多吃水果補充維生素
注意：
（1）詞數(shù)120左右；
（2）適當(dāng)增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫．
參考詞匯：霧霾haze          維生素vitamin
Recently haze pollution has happened in many cities of China．It's one of the most dangerous weather conditions．Many accidents have occurred due to low visibility caused by haze．What's worse，it also affects our health．if breathing in haze，people may feel uncomfortable and get ill．（高分句型一）
The reason for haze is air pollution．It results from waste gases released from cars，factories or construction sties．In view of the above，we need to protect ourselves from haze pollution．First of all，in case of haze pollution，we shouldn't open the windows or take exercise before the sun rises and after sunset．（高分句型二）Besides，we'd better wear masks when we go outside．What's more，we should eat more fruit，from which we can get enough vitamins to build up the resistance to disease．（高分句型三）．

Answer 1

分析 題目假設(shè)了你的身份，即校報小記者李華，需要為校報寫一篇英語短文，介紹最近在我國很多城市發(fā)生的霧霾（haze）天氣．同時參考以下三個要點作文：危害（阻礙交通，危害健康）、原因（空氣污染）、自我防護措施（霧霾天氣早晚少開窗、多吃水果補充維生素等）．不要出現(xiàn)標點和拼寫錯誤，盡量保持卷面整潔，字體美觀，注意行文的連貫性．
亮點說明：
范文中對于"原因"這一詞的表達用了多種形式的表達，"Many accidents have occurred due to low visibility caused by haze"，"it also affects our health．"，"The reason for haze is air pollution"，"It results from waste gases"，多種形式表達同一種意思，避免重復(fù)，可以使文章變化多樣，避免單調(diào)乏味；
范文中使用了較多的語法知識，動詞過去分詞短語做定語 low visibility caused by haze，省略句If breathing in haze，祈使句we shouldn't open the windows or take exercise before the sun rises and after sunset，時間狀語從句when we go outside，非限定性定語從句we should eat more fruit，from which we can get enough vitamins to build up the resistance to diseases，固定句型結(jié)構(gòu)sth has occured、sb had better do sth 等．動詞過去分詞短語做定語、省略句、祈使句、時間狀語從句、非限定性定語從句、固定句型結(jié)構(gòu)等語法的使用提升了文章的檔次，同時也顯示較高的語法知識點使用能力；
范文中注意使用了what's worse，also，in view of the above，first of all，besides，what's more，等做連詞，增加了文章的連貫性，使文章上下聯(lián)系緊密；
范文中使用了一些固定短語：protect sb from，in case of，take exercise，before the sun rises a，after sunset；build up等，豐富了文章的內(nèi)容，使文章更加充實完整．

解答 Recently haze pollution has happened in many cities of China．It's one of the most dangerous weather conditions．Many accidents have occurred due to low visibility caused by haze．What's worse，it also affects our health．if breathing in haze，people may feel uncomfortable and get ill．（高分句型一）
     The reason for haze is air pollution．It results from waste gases released from cars，factories or construction sties．In view of the above，we need to protect ourselves from haze pollution．First of all，in case of haze pollution，we shouldn't open the windows or take exercise before the sun rises and after sunset．（高分句型二）Besides，we'd better wear masks when we go outside．What's more，we should eat more fruit，from which we can get enough vitamins to build up the resistance to disease．（高分句型三）

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