Question

目前，許多學校對學生采取封閉式管理，學生對此看法不一。請根據(jù)下表所提供的信息，寫一篇短文，并簡談你的看法。

有的同學支持這種管理	有的同學反對這種管理	你的看法
學校是學知識的地方，應該靜心學習；部分學生自制能力差，離校易惹麻煩	學校限制我們的自由，見家人朋友時間少；學生和社會接觸少，對其不甚了解	？

【寫作要求】
詞數(shù)為100詞左右；
開頭已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)；
參考詞匯：限制 restrict    自制力 self-control ability
Nowadays, many schools use the way of closed management to manage  students, leaving students less freedom to leave the school at will.
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Answer 1

One Possible Version
Nowadays, many schools use the way of closed management to manage students, leaving students less freedom to leave the school at will. Students have different opinions about it.
Some students think school is the best place to get knowledge so they should study with a peaceful heart.  Some  students  lack  the  ability  to  control themselves. Once out of school, they may get themselves into trouble.
Some others think they enjoy less freedom and have less time to be with their families and friends. Besides, they get few chances to get in touch with society, which makes them a frog in a well. Therefore, they have less interest in their studies.
Personally I think, it is necessary to keep students at school. But at the same time schools should organize various activities so that students can enjoy their school life.

試題分析：本文是一篇提綱作文。寫作時首先要仔細審題，確定人稱，時態(tài)，文體。內(nèi)容要點要全面，上下段要使用連接詞做到連貫。我們在寫作中應當遵循語言表述的經(jīng)濟原則，即用盡可能少的形式表達盡可能多的語義內(nèi)容，力求簡潔精練。根據(jù)提綱的提示，寫出所列要點，要全面。我們在用詞上應該仔細揣摩，準確清晰地表達我們的思想，剔除冗詞贅語，使文章言簡意賅。
【亮點說明】文中使用了非常好的短語和句子為文章增色不少，比如leaving students less freedom to leave the school at will. Some others think they enjoy less freedom and have less time to be with their families and friends.等。還運用了定語從句which makes them a frog in a well.等。并注意了句子的銜接如：Besides, Therefore, Personally I think，But等。
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