Question

16．你的美國筆友Tom來信和你討論個人信息保護問題，讓你就如何保護個人信息給他一些建議．請你以李華的名義重點從以下兩個方面談談自己的看法：
1、給予足夠重視；
2、學會如何保護．
注意：
1、詞數(shù)120左右；
2、文章開頭已經(jīng)寫好，但不計人總詞數(shù)．
Dear Tom．
We are living in the Information Age．                                                  
Yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書面表達屬于提綱類作文，根據(jù)提示信息美國筆友Tom來信和你討論個人信息保護問題，讓你就如何保護個人信息給他一些建議．請你以李華的名義重點從以下兩個方面談談自己的看法，寫作時注意以下幾點：1、仔細閱讀有關提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，明確幾個要點：分別給予足夠重視和學會如何保護兩個方面來討論該話題 2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進行分析、構思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關系來寫．本文寫作時可以按照要點所給的順序?qū)懀?、根據(jù)要表達的內(nèi)容確定句子的時態(tài)、語態(tài)；就本文而言應該用一般現(xiàn)在時態(tài)．4．注意使用高級詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點．
【亮點說明】本文結構緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達：First of all首先；Secondly其次；For example比如；pay  attention to注意；If necessary如果必要的話；
Remember：once you've shared something，you will lose control of it and some people may share upsetting things about you without you knowing it．（高分句型一）
If you receive an officiallooking email that asks you to send your financial details，you should never reply as you could become a victim of identity fraud．（高分句型二）

解答 Dear Tom，
        We are living in the Information Age．The protection of personal information is becoming more and more important．Here I'd like to give you some advice on this．
         First of all，you should pay enough attention to the protection of your personal information．Remember：once you've shared something，you will lose control of it and some people may share upsetting things about you without you knowing it．（高分句型一）
        Secondly，you must know how to protect your personal information．For example，never provide your personal information for any strangers or people you know online．If necessary，you'd better confirm it is for legal use before letting it out．If you receive an officiallooking email that asks you to send your financial details，you should never reply as you could become a victim of identity fraud．（高分句型二）
                                                                                                                                                                                                           Yours，
                                                                                                                                                                                                             Li Hua

點評 英語寫作是一項主觀性較強的測試題．它不僅考查學生的寫作基礎而且還考查學生在寫作過程中綜合運用語言的能力．在撰寫時要注意主謂語一致，時態(tài)呼應，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓練：一是語言基礎方面的訓練，要有扎實的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識和能力 方面的訓練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．