Question

9．假定英語課上老師要求同桌之間交換修改作文，請(qǐng)你修改你同桌寫的以下作文．文中共有10處語言錯(cuò)誤，每句中最多有兩處．錯(cuò)誤涉及一個(gè)單詞的增加、刪除或修改．
增加：在缺詞處加一個(gè)漏詞符號(hào)（/\），并在其下面寫出該加的詞．
刪除：把多余的詞用斜線（\）劃掉．
修改：在錯(cuò)的詞下劃一橫線（一），并在該詞下面寫出修改后的詞．
注意：1．每處錯(cuò)誤及修改均僅限一詞； 2．只允許修改10處，多者（從第11處起）不計(jì)分．
During the last summer holiday，my parents and I paid visit to my grandparents by train．There was a large number of people and the train was crowded，but everyone helped those who had lots of baggages and behaved politely．Along the way，we chatted happily and enjoyed beautifully views．At first，we saw one hill after other．Then which came into view were fields with green crops．In a six-hour trip，we arrived at my grandparents'house．Tired as I felt，but I was happy to see my grandparents，whom I haven't seen for a long time．It was really an excited trip because it was the first time that I had taken such a long-distance train．

Answer 1

分析 本文主要講述作者和父母乘火車去看望祖父母．在火車沿途上看到了一些美麗的風(fēng)景，同時(shí)，也感受到了人們相互幫助的情景．

解答 During the last summer holiday，my parents and I paid∧visit to my grandparents by train．There was a large number of people and the train was crowded，but everyone helped those who had lots of baggages and behaved politely．Along the way，we chatted happily and enjoyed beautifully views．At first，we saw one hill after other．Then which came into view were fields with green crops．In a six-hour trip，we arrived at my grandparents'house．Tired as I felt，but I was happy to see my grandparents，whom I haven't seen for a long time．It was really an excited trip because it was the first time that I had taken such a long-distance train．
詳解：
1．加a 考查固定搭配．pay a visit to意為"參觀，拜訪"，是固定搭配．
2．was改為were 考查主謂一致．在there be句型中，be動(dòng)詞的人稱和數(shù)與be后的主語保持一致，此處主語是a large number of people，謂語用復(fù)數(shù)．
3．baggages改為baggage 考查名詞．baggage是不可數(shù)名詞，沒有復(fù)數(shù)形式．
4．beautifully改為beautiful 考查形容詞．views是名詞，應(yīng)用形容詞修飾名詞．
5．other改為another 考查固定搭配．one after another意為"一個(gè)接一個(gè)地"，是固定搭配．
6．which改為what 考查連詞．此處應(yīng)用what引導(dǎo)主語從句，表示"所…的事物"．
7．In改為After 考查介詞．此處表示六個(gè)小時(shí)的旅程后，用after．
8．去掉but 考查連詞．前后兩個(gè)單句用一個(gè)連詞連接，已有as連接，but是多余的，要去掉．
9．haven't改為hadn't 考查動(dòng)詞時(shí)態(tài)．從句的動(dòng)作顯然發(fā)生在主句動(dòng)作之前，主句用了一般過去時(shí)，從句需要用過去完成時(shí)．
10．excited改為exciting 考查現(xiàn)在分詞．此處修飾trip，故用exciting，表示"令人興奮的"．

點(diǎn)評(píng) 高考短文改錯(cuò)題的形式有說明文，短文故事，書信等，具有很強(qiáng)的實(shí)用性．短文的內(nèi)容和語言都符合高中學(xué)生的實(shí)際，從表面上看類似一篇學(xué)生習(xí)作．首先，通讀全文，了解短文大意，把握全篇的時(shí)態(tài)、人稱及行文邏輯，在通讀全文時(shí)把一些容易的錯(cuò)誤先改好，再進(jìn)行逐句改錯(cuò)．其次，要進(jìn)行逐個(gè)句子的改錯(cuò)．這是要對(duì)文中的詞法、句法和語篇著重分析和特別注意．最后把改好的短文再閱讀一遍，檢查答案是否正確，感覺是否還有不妥之處，最終形成定稿．