Question

12．近年來，食品安全事件頻頻曝光，食品安全問題成為人們關(guān)注的成為人們焦點(diǎn)．最近，某網(wǎng)站的一個(gè)論壇正在就這個(gè)問題展開討論，請你也來參與這個(gè)討論，談?wù)勀銓�這一問題的看法．
你的討論需包括：
食品安全問題的現(xiàn)狀
產(chǎn)生這一問題的原因
解決這一問題的建議．

Answer 1

分析 高分句型一：
Second，the overuse of agricultural pesticide has some bad effect on food quality．
高分句型二：
Furthermore，some food producers inject hormones into domestic animals so as to make them grow more quickly and thus they can turn in more profit．
句型一 the overuse of agricultural pesticide has some bad effect on food quality 該句子的謂語部分使用了一個(gè)重要的短語：have an…effect on sth 對．．有重要影響
句型二 so as to make them grow more quickly and thus they can turn in more profit．該部分使用了so as to 位于句尾，作目的狀語
此外，本文還使用了以下高級詞匯和短語：all in all 總之 as a result 結(jié)果

解答 Currently，many problems concerning the safety of food have caused much attention．As for me，I believe at least three factors account for this issue．
   First，I observe that profits drive many food producers to commit illegal things．They aim to gain more money at the expense of consumers'health．Second，the overuse of agricultural pesticide has some bad effect on food quality．（高分句型一）The execssive pesticide bears enormous health risk for people．Furthermore，some food producers inject hormones into domestic animals so as to make them grow more quickly and thus they can turn in more profit．（高分句型二） As a result，people's health has been seriously disturbed．（分析原因）
   All in all，food safety is such a great concern，and we all should estabilsh laws and implement them effectively to avoid producing posisonous foods．（提出建議）

點(diǎn)評 該書面表達(dá)為提綱類，該類作文規(guī)定了考生的寫作思路，題干里一般羅列了想要的寫作要點(diǎn)．考生在寫作時(shí)應(yīng)注意盡量做到將寫作要點(diǎn)與主題緊密聯(lián)系，運(yùn)用準(zhǔn)確的、簡潔明了的語言將作文闡述清楚．