Question

7．假如你叫李華，是一位高中生．隨著科技的發(fā)展iPods已經(jīng)成為中學(xué)生的新寵．用iPods既可以聽音樂，閱讀電子書，又可以玩電子游戲．請(qǐng)你用英語(yǔ)給某英語(yǔ)報(bào)社寫一封信，談?wù)勚袑W(xué)生使用iPods的情況．信的內(nèi)容包括以下幾點(diǎn)：
    1．使用iPods對(duì)學(xué)習(xí)的好處．
    2．對(duì)課堂紀(jì)律和學(xué)習(xí)可能產(chǎn)生的負(fù)面影響．
    3．提出自己的建議并且說明理由．
    注意：詞數(shù)120左右．
Dear Editor，
I'm a senior high school student，named Li Hua．____________________________________
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Answer 1

分析 本文是一篇提綱作文．根據(jù)所提供的材料信息，寫一篇短文，寫作要點(diǎn)包括：1．使用iPad對(duì)學(xué)習(xí)的好處；2．使用iPad對(duì)學(xué)生產(chǎn)生的負(fù)面影響；3．提出自己的建議并說明理由寫作時(shí)人稱以第一和第二人稱為主，時(shí)態(tài)以一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)為主．
重點(diǎn)詞匯：a number of （大量的）；Apparently（似乎，表面上）； be helpful to （對(duì)…有幫助）；What's worse（更糟糕的是）； make good use of （充分利用）；
高分句型：1．Using an iPad，we can listen to music，download a number of learning materials and read them on the screen．
句子的主語(yǔ)we與動(dòng)詞use存在邏輯上的主謂關(guān)系，現(xiàn)在分詞形式using作伴隨狀語(yǔ)．
2．Some students，however，bring their iPads to classrooms and listen to music with earphones，which makes the teacher and other students greatly annoyed．
which引導(dǎo)一個(gè)非限制性定語(yǔ)從句，關(guān)系代詞which指代上文提到的情況．
3．In my opinion，①as a student，we should make good use of iPads②to help achieve academic success．
①介詞短語(yǔ)作狀語(yǔ)；②不定式短語(yǔ)作目的狀語(yǔ)．

解答 Dear editor，
I'm a senior high school student，named Li Hua．Now many students have iPads and think it's a fashion to use them．Using an iPad，we can listen to music，download a number of learning materials and read them on the screen（高分句型一）．Apparently，it is helpful to our study，especially to our English listening．（iPad的益處）
Some students，however，bring their iPads to classrooms and listen to music with earphones，which makes the teacher and other students greatly annoyed（高分句型二）．What's worse，some of them even waste precious time in class playing video games．（iPad對(duì)學(xué)習(xí)的影響）
In my opinion，as a student，we should make good use of iPads to help achieve academic success（高分句型三）．The classroom is a place for students to study，and therefore concentration is awfully needed for us to learn our lessons．Furthermore，the school should make a rule to guide the students to use iPads in a proper way．（作者建議）
Yours sincerely，
Li Hua

點(diǎn)評(píng) 提綱作文在寫作時(shí)要注意內(nèi)容是否覆蓋了所給要點(diǎn)．寫作時(shí)注意準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，使得上下文意思連貫，盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，使文章淺顯易懂，同時(shí)也要注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和高級(jí)句型使文章顯得更有檔次．