Question

5．最近我校擬開展以"校園拒絕箏食"為主題的活動(dòng)．假如你是該校學(xué)生會主席，請你以學(xué)生會的名義，參考下面的內(nèi)容提示，給全校學(xué)生寫一封倡議書．
內(nèi)容提示：（1）描述吃零食的現(xiàn)象；
（2）闡述吃零食的影響；
（3）提出合理化的建議．
注意：（1）詞數(shù)100左右，開頭己為你寫好（不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)）．
（2）參考詞匯：snacks零食：phenomenon現(xiàn)象．
Dear fellow students．
There is a serious phenomenon in our school．We find many students will crowd in the school store to buy snacks after each class．Some students even eat snacks in class．
Eating snacks is a bad habit and is also a waste of money．（高分句型一）In addition，most snacks are unhealthy fond，for they contain too much fat and sugar．（高分句型二）Eating snacks improperly may lead to fatness and illness．What is worse，some students throw the wrappers everywhere，which pollutes our campus．（高分句型三）
Dear fellow students，we shouldn't act like kids any more．We high school students should develop god habits．Remember that three regular meals a day as well as a balanced diet are essential for us．Let's form good eating habits and say no to snacks!
Students'Union．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書面表達(dá)屬于提綱類作文，根據(jù)提示信息最近我校擬開展以"校園拒絕箏食"為主題的活動(dòng)．假如你是該校學(xué)生會主席，請你以學(xué)生會的名義，參考下面的內(nèi)容提示，給全校學(xué)生寫一封倡議書，寫作時(shí)注意以下幾點(diǎn)：1、仔細(xì)閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，明確幾個(gè)要點(diǎn)：：（1）描述吃零食的現(xiàn)象；（2）闡述吃零食的影響；
（3）提出合理化的建議． 2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進(jìn)行分析、構(gòu)思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來寫．本文寫作時(shí)可以按照要點(diǎn)所給的順序?qū)懀?、根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定句子的時(shí)態(tài)、語態(tài)；就本文而言應(yīng)該用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)．4．注意使用高級詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點(diǎn)．
【亮點(diǎn)說明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達(dá)：crowd in 涌入；a waste of浪費(fèi)；In addition另外；What is worse更糟的是；form good habits形成好的習(xí)慣
Eating snacks is a bad habit and is also a waste of money．（高分句型一）
In addition，most snacks are unhealthy fond，for they contain too much fat and sugar．（高分句型二）
What is worse，some students throw the wrappers everywhere，which pollutes our campus．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear fellow students，
      There is a serious phenomenon in our school．We find many students will crowd in the school store to buy snacks after each class．Some students even eat snacks in class．
      Eating snacks is a bad habit and is also a waste of money．（高分句型一）In addition，most snacks are unhealthy fond，for they contain too much fat and sugar．（高分句型二）Eating snacks improperly may lead to fatness and illness．What is worse，some students throw the wrappers everywhere，which pollutes our campus．（高分句型三）
      Dear fellow students，we shouldn't act like kids any more．We high school students should develop god habits．Remember that three regular meals a day as well as a balanced diet are essential for us．Let's form good eating habits and say no to snacks!
                                                                                                                                                                                                            Students'Union

點(diǎn)評 英語寫作是一項(xiàng)主觀性較強(qiáng)的測試題．它不僅考查學(xué)生的寫作基礎(chǔ)而且還考查學(xué)生在寫作過程中綜合運(yùn)用語言的能力．在撰寫時(shí)要注意主謂語一致，時(shí)態(tài)呼應(yīng)，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓(xùn)練：一是語言基礎(chǔ)方面的訓(xùn)練，要有扎實(shí)的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識和能力 方面的訓(xùn)練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．