Question

最近中國(guó)的空氣質(zhì)量引起了廣泛的關(guān)注。請(qǐng)閱讀下面的漫畫(huà)，按要求用英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)一篇短文。
內(nèi)容要求： 1. 簡(jiǎn)要描述漫畫(huà)內(nèi)容；
2. 簡(jiǎn)要分析產(chǎn)生這種現(xiàn)象的原因；
3. 針對(duì)以上現(xiàn)象談?wù)勀阕约旱目捶ǎㄖ辽賰牲c(diǎn)）。
注意：
1.詞數(shù)150左右，開(kāi)頭已經(jīng)寫(xiě)好，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。
2.作文中不得提及考生所在的學(xué)校和本人姓名。
3.參考詞匯：口罩mask； 霧霾haze

Recently, the air quality in China _____________________________________________.
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Answer 1

Recently ,the air quality in China has raised widespread concern. As is indicated in the picture, an old man and his grandson are taking a walk in the street with masks covering their mouths. As the haze is becoming heavier and heavier, they find it hard to see the buildings and trees around them clearly.
The picture conveyed here is that air pollution is quite severe in China. Many factors account for this phenomenon. In the first place, vehicles sending large quantities of poisonous gases are a major source of air pollution. Furthermore, factories that release a great deal of smoke are also responsible for the poor air quality. Besides, burning materials like coal or oil for homes and offices is another major contributor to air pollution.
Personally, to better the air quality, the government and the common citizens should make joint efforts. Riding and walking are wise options for public travels. Meanwhile, effective laws are supposed to be made to guarantee good air quality.

試題分析：這是一篇開(kāi)放式作文，也是看圖作文，認(rèn)真讀圖，可知圖畫(huà)反映了現(xiàn)在的普遍存在的空氣質(zhì)量問(wèn)題，要求描述漫畫(huà)內(nèi)容； 簡(jiǎn)要分析產(chǎn)生這種現(xiàn)象的原因；針對(duì)以上現(xiàn)象談?wù)勀阕约旱目捶ǎ瑢?xiě)作時(shí)要添加些內(nèi)容，使文章看起來(lái)更充實(shí)，要組成一篇通順連貫的短文。需要注意緊扣文章主題，給出的要點(diǎn)都需要包括，缺一不可。寫(xiě)作時(shí)注意準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系，一定要契合給出的開(kāi)頭，不能出現(xiàn)文章脫節(jié)問(wèn)題。盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時(shí)也要注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和高級(jí)句型使文章顯得更有檔次。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】這篇范文最大的特點(diǎn)是短語(yǔ)和句式多變： account for解釋?zhuān)琤e supposed to 應(yīng)該做…，As is indicated in the picture, an old man and his grandson are taking a walk in the street with masks covering their mouths.這句話用了非限制性定語(yǔ)從句和現(xiàn)在分詞做狀語(yǔ)， As the haze is becoming heavier and heavier, they find it hard to see the buildings and trees around them clearly.這句話用了it做形式賓語(yǔ)， The picture conveyed here is that air pollution is quite severe in China. 這句話用了表語(yǔ)從句， vehicles sending large quantities of poisonous gases are a major source of air pollution. F這句話用了現(xiàn)在分詞做定語(yǔ)，actories that release a great deal of smoke are also responsible for the poor air quality.這句話用了定語(yǔ)從句， burning materials like coal or oil for homes and offices is another major contributor to air pollution.這句話用了動(dòng)名詞做主語(yǔ)。
to better the air quality, the government and the common citizens should make joint efforts. 這句話用了不定式做目的狀語(yǔ)，還有范文還使用了In the first place, Furthermore, Besides, Personally,這樣的關(guān)聯(lián)詞使文章更加連貫。