Question

10．最近，李越被評(píng)為你們班的"每周之星"．請(qǐng)你根據(jù)她的事跡（在上周六下午，不顧天氣炎熱，為班級(jí)選購(gòu)歌詠比賽服裝），用英語(yǔ)為班級(jí)板報(bào)寫(xiě)一篇l00一120個(gè)詞的短文．你的文章應(yīng)包括下列要點(diǎn)：
    1．李越的事跡及其對(duì)同學(xué)的影響；        2．你的評(píng)論．
    注意：1．文章的標(biāo)題和開(kāi)頭已給出（不計(jì)詞數(shù)）．
         2．參考詞匯：singing contest 歌詠比賽
Costume   服裝
Star Student of the Week
Li Yue has been awarded the title of"Star Student of the Week"for what she did for our class．On the hot afternoon of last Saturday，Li Yue went downtown and walked from one store to another，looking for the costumes we would wear in the singing contest． While the rest of us were enjoying our leisure time in cool and comfortable rooms，she spent the whole afternoon searching and selecting．Finally，she found the right clothes．Deeply moved by her efforts，we tried our best and won the first prize in the contest．
Li Yue is always warm-hearted and cares a lot about the class．Besides，she often devotes her spare time to helping others．She has set a good example for us．Therefore，she deserves the honor and we should learn from her．．

Answer 1

分析 本作文為應(yīng)用文，根據(jù)所給要點(diǎn)內(nèi)容為班級(jí)"每周之星"李越寫(xiě)一篇人物事跡，屬于提綱作文．時(shí)態(tài)為一般過(guò)去時(shí)和一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)．人稱(chēng)以第三人稱(chēng)為主．重要短語(yǔ)：award the title of…（授予…稱(chēng)號(hào)），devote…to…（致力于），spend time in doing （花時(shí)間做…），try one's best…（努力做），warm-hearted（熱心腸的），cares about （關(guān)心），set a good example for（為…樹(shù)立榜樣）．

解答 Star Student of the Week
      Li Yue has been awarded the title of"Star Student of the Week"for what she did for our class．On the hot afternoon of last Saturday，Li Yue went downtown and walked from one store to another，looking for the costumes we would wear in the singing contest．【高分句型】While the rest of us were enjoying our leisure time in cool and comfortable rooms，she spent the whole afternoon searching and selecting．Finally，she found the right clothes．Deeply moved by her efforts，we tried our best and won the first prize in the contest．【高分句型】（李越的事跡及其對(duì)同學(xué)的影響）
      Li Yue is always warm-hearted and cares a lot about the class．Besides，she often devotes her spare time to helping others．She has set a good example for us．Therefore，she deserves the honor and we should learn from her．（你的評(píng)論）

點(diǎn)評(píng) 寫(xiě)好提綱式作文的關(guān)鍵是認(rèn)真審題和分析所給的提綱，并以此為基礎(chǔ)充分發(fā)揮自己的想象力，靈活運(yùn)用英語(yǔ)知識(shí)，采用不同的表達(dá)方式將各要點(diǎn)完整地表述出來(lái)，注意主次分明，詳略得當(dāng)．語(yǔ)言力求準(zhǔn)確、簡(jiǎn)潔．根據(jù)情景的發(fā)展，按順序安排好材料．同時(shí)應(yīng)選用合適的連接詞或過(guò)渡詞，使文章具有一定的連貫性．最后必須認(rèn)真查驗(yàn)是否有漏寫(xiě)情況，有無(wú)拼寫(xiě)錯(cuò)誤及標(biāo)點(diǎn)誤用等．