Question

現(xiàn)今孩子迷戀電腦、網(wǎng)絡(luò)的現(xiàn)象越來(lái)越嚴(yán)重，有的孩子甚至足不出戶，如何教育引導(dǎo)孩子，成為人們的熱點(diǎn)話題。請(qǐng)閱讀下面的漫畫，按要求用英文寫一篇短文。

內(nèi)容要求：
1．描述漫畫內(nèi)容；
2．分析漫畫所揭示的問題；
3．提出你的看法。
注意：
1．短文開頭已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)；
2．考生可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，使文章內(nèi)容充實(shí)、連貫；
3．詞數(shù)120左右；
4．文中不能出現(xiàn)考生的具體信息。
This picture presents to us a scene ____________________________________________________
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Answer 1

One possible version：
This picture presents to us a scene in which a family of three are walking on a country road. The father is holding a long pole with a computer tied to the end. The son is chasing the computer happily.
It shows a common phenomenon nowadays that some children are so addicted to the Internet that they tend to lock themselves indoors on weekends, playing computer games or surfing the Internet. Consequently, they are becoming more and more reluctant to communicate with their peers.
Personally, the more time children spend on computers, the more physical and mental problems they well suffer from. To rid children of their addiction to the Internet, parents should not only guide them in a proper way but also spare more time to stay with them, such as going out and visiting relatives. Only in this way can they resist the temptation of the Internet and lead a normal life.

解析根據(jù)提示可知這是畫圖式作文。圖畫式作文有個(gè)典型“三段式”寫法。即在第一段描寫圖畫，第二段結(jié)合現(xiàn)實(shí)生活分析圖畫的含義，第三段表達(dá)個(gè)人觀點(diǎn)，進(jìn)行個(gè)人總結(jié)。因?yàn)楦呖奸喚頃r(shí)間緊張，閱卷老師往往在極短的時(shí)間就瀏覽完文章，所以大家如果能夠保證范文章結(jié)構(gòu)銜接緊湊，緊扣題目要求，層次分明的話，往往也不難拿高分。在文章的第一段，作者簡(jiǎn)單直接用一個(gè)限制性定語(yǔ)從句描述圖畫This picture presents to us a scene，簡(jiǎn)潔自然。第二段由一個(gè)長(zhǎng)句和一個(gè)短句組成，第一句是根據(jù)圖畫的內(nèi)容然后描述實(shí)際生活現(xiàn)象It shows a common phenomenon nowadays that some children are so addicted to the Internet that they tend to lock themselves indoors on weekends，其中的同位語(yǔ)從句用的恰到好處。最后一段以Personally開始，一個(gè)單詞就告訴閱卷老師作者的寫作意圖是歸納總結(jié)。這一點(diǎn)也是值得學(xué)習(xí)的。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】
這篇范文是典型的三段式作文。其結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，文章的段首句都是主題句，然后用幾句話分層次展開，簡(jiǎn)單分析，最后一段按照出題者的要求表明了自己對(duì)圖畫所展示的問題的看法。
這樣的文章在高考中是有很大的優(yōu)勢(shì)的。老師閱卷是往往沒有時(shí)間細(xì)看每一句，幾秒鐘就掃視完全篇，在這種情況下，文章的段首句就成了重中之重。范文的段首句This picture presents to us a scene in which a family of three are walking on a country road. 和It shows a common phenomenon nowadays that some children are so addicted to the Internet that they tend to lock themselves indoors on weekends, playing computer games or surfing the Internet. 以及最后一段Personally, the more time children spend on computers, the more physical and mental problems they well suffer from.再加上文章中一些高級(jí)詞匯如Consequently，reluctant，peers，resist等等，和一些短句如be addicted to, rid of, suffer from, visiting relatives等給文章在細(xì)節(jié)上添分。