Question

書面表達(dá)（滿分30分）

假如你是來自美國的Peter，在中國留學(xué)期間，經(jīng)常在馬路上看到一些人不遵守交通規(guī)則，于是向某報(bào)社寫信反映此情況，內(nèi)容如下：

1．部分行人過馬路時(shí)慢慢悠悠或攀爬護(hù)欄；

2．某些騎自行車的人擅闖紅燈；

3．一些司機(jī)駕車時(shí)不系安全帶；超速行駛；在開車時(shí)抽煙、打電話；

4．你的看法和建議……

注意：字?jǐn)?shù)120左右（文章的開頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計(jì)入字?jǐn)?shù)）

參考詞匯：行人pedestrian；護(hù)欄 guardrail

Dear Editor,

I am a foreign student from America and I am studying in China. I find many people break the traffic rules here.

                                                                            

                                                                            

                                                                            

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Best wishes.

Yours,

Peter

 

Answer 1

【答案】

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Possible version:

I am a foreign student from America and I am studying in China. I find many people break the traffic rules here. For example, some pedestrians cross the streets slowly and some jump over the guardrails in the streets. Some cyclists don’t stop when the traffic lights turn red. What’s worse, many drivers don’t fasten their seat belts while driving. Smoking, speaking on mobile phones and exceeding the speed limit while driving can be seen everywhere. In my opinion, these actions are very irresponsible and dangerous. It is our duty to obey the traffic rules. We must treasure our lives and protect the lives of others. So I suggest that those who break traffic rules should be fined or punished. Only in this way will they think twice about breaking traffic rules again.

Best wishes.

Yours,

Peter

【解析】

試題分析：拿到作文題目，首先要認(rèn)真審題，這是一篇提綱作文，假如你是來自美國的Peter，在中國留學(xué)期間，經(jīng)常在馬路上看到一些人不遵守交通規(guī)則，于是向某報(bào)社寫信反映此情況，內(nèi)容如下：1．部分行人過馬路時(shí)慢慢悠悠或攀爬護(hù)欄；2．某些騎自行車的人擅闖紅燈；3．一些司機(jī)駕車時(shí)不系安全帶；超速行駛；在開車時(shí)抽煙、打電話；4．你的看法和建議……所以要用第一人稱來寫,且要用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)。需要寫的內(nèi)容已經(jīng)給出，但是寫作時(shí)不要僅僅對要點(diǎn)進(jìn)行生硬的翻譯，而是要添加些內(nèi)容，使文章看起來更充實(shí)，要組成一篇通順連貫的短文。需要注意緊扣文章主題，給出的要點(diǎn)都需要包括，缺一不可。寫作時(shí)注意準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系，不能出現(xiàn)文章脫節(jié)問題。盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時(shí)也要注意使用高級詞匯和高級句型使文章顯得更有檔次。同時(shí)注意題目要求字?jǐn)?shù)120詞左右。

考點(diǎn)：提綱作文

點(diǎn)評：本文屬于提綱作文，動筆前，一定要認(rèn)真分析要點(diǎn)，理解要點(diǎn)要表達(dá)的含義，不能遺漏要點(diǎn)，跑題偏題。平時(shí)除了加強(qiáng)詞匯積累，寫作聯(lián)系以外，還可以適當(dāng)記憶一些類似的范文，這樣在考試中可以起到事半功倍的效果。