Question

13．3月8日學校舉行一次歌頌女性的演講活動，請寫一篇演講稿，介紹一位你最尊敬的女性（可以是你的家人、朋友、師長、名人…）
內容：1．描述這位女性
2．她值得你尊敬的原因
3．是什么給你留下深刻印象并做此選擇
要求：1．字數(shù)100左右，
2．可以適當增加細節(jié)，以使用文連貫
3．短文中不能出現(xiàn)與本人相關的信息．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇演講稿，介紹一位你最尊敬的女性，描述這位女性，值得尊敬的原因及留給自己的深刻印象．要符合演講稿的語氣，注意文章文體、人稱和時態(tài)．根據(jù)所給提綱，列出要點，并以此為基礎充分發(fā)揮自己的想象力，靈活運用英語知識，采用不同的表達方式將各要點完整地表述出來，注意主次分明，詳略得當．語言力求準確、簡潔．根據(jù)情景的發(fā)展，按順序安排好材料．同時應選用合適的連接詞或過渡詞，使文章具有一定的連貫性．
【亮點說明】文中使用非常好的短語和句子為文章增色不少，比如takes good care of，bring up，complain，thrifty and industrious，還運用了so that，as，ever since引導的狀語從句等等．
She takes good care of her children and keeps them all at school．（高級句型）
As our family is too poor to keep a servant，my mother has always to do very much work．（高級句型）

解答 My Mother
            Good morning，every body!Today my topic is my mother．Do you love your mother？Of course，the answer is"yes"．Mother is always ready to give everything she has to her children，not to receive．My mother is a kind and gentle woman．She is always very gentle．She takes good care of her children and keeps them all at school．（高級句型）I have one brother and two sistets，so she gets four children in all．She gives us every comfort．We all love her and she loves us too．（描述形象）
       My mother has too much to do in bringing us up．As our family is too poor to keep a servant，my mother has always to do very much work．（高級句型）She gets up very early and sleeps very late every day．She works hard，yet without complaining．（高級句型）（尊敬的原因）
       She is also a thrifty and industrious woman．She saves every cent that she can and keeps everything in order．As she has been busy ever since she was young，she looks older than she really is．Her face is wrinkled，her hair becomes silver white，but she works as hard as ever．（深刻印象）

點評 應該注意適當增加細節(jié)以使行文連貫，比如適當選用表示因果、遞進、轉折關系的連接詞，使文章流暢、通順，并避免因反復使用句式相同的簡單句而造成的單調感．（1）認真審題，確定體裁． （2）構思要點．根據(jù)題目要求，理解要表達的要點．設計好文章的層次段落，考慮所用時態(tài)、人稱等，把要點串聯(lián)起來，構成文章框架．（3）選詞造句，避難選易．（4）認真檢查，避免錯誤．仔細閱讀全文，查找是否有錯，注意時態(tài)、單詞拼寫、字母大小寫、標點是否有誤，句式是否正確．邏輯是否一致．