Question

5．一家英語報社向中學生征文，主題是"My dream school"，請根據(jù)下列要點及暢想寫一篇作文．
1 學校上學，放學時間及開設的課程．
2 學生的校內外活動．
3 學校的環(huán)境及師生關系．
注意：①詞數(shù)120左右  ②可根據(jù)內容要點適當增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書面表達屬于提綱類作文，根據(jù)提示信息"My dream school"為主題，寫作時注意以下幾點：1、仔細閱讀有關提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，明確三個要點：學校上學，放學時間及開設的課程，學生的校內外活動，學校的環(huán)境及師生關系．2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內進行分析、構思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關系來寫．本文寫作時可以按照要點所給的順序寫．3、根據(jù)要表達的內容確定句子的時態(tài)、語態(tài)；就本文而言應該用一般現(xiàn)在時態(tài)．4．注意使用高級詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點．
【亮點說明】本文結構緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達．after-school activities課外活動；play sports 做運動；kind and helpful和藹樂于助人
They are not only our teachers but also our friends．（高分句型）

解答 My Dream School
My dream school starts at 8：30 a．m．and ends at 3：30 p．m．（高分句型）There are three lessons in the morning and two in the afternoon．We don't need to do so much homework．Therefore，we have more time for after-school activities．For example，we can do reading for one and a half hours and play sports for one hour every day．
My dream school looks like a big garden．There are all kinds of flowers and trees around the classroom buildings．We can lie on the grass for a rest，or sit by the lake listening to music．The teachers here are kind and helpful．They are not only our teachers but also our friends．（高分句型）
How I wish I could receive education at such a school!

點評 提綱類寫作的文章較開放式的文體，比較好寫．學生在寫作的過程中，首先思路要清晰，要對所表達的句子通順的說出來，遇到不會的要學會替換所用語，來達到同樣的意思．在每一篇作文中，對于表達觀點的句子，都要用上起承轉合的連詞來加強文章的層次感，適當運用俗語，運用平時常用的句式來使文章富有變化，表達地道得體．