Question

9．假如你叫李華，你們學(xué)校下周六將舉行Run for Love 公益活動，旨在為貧困地區(qū)的學(xué)生和殘疾兒童募捐．請給你的朋友Tom 寫封電子郵件邀請他一同參加，要點如下：
1．活動的時間、地點及目的；
2．活動的內(nèi)容：跑步、捐款等．
注意：
1．詞數(shù) 100 左右；
2．可以適當增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫；
3．開頭和結(jié)尾已為你寫好，但不計入總詞數(shù)．
Dear Tom，
I'd like to invite you to join us for the Run for Love．The activity sponsored by some charitable organizations is intended to raise money for students in poor areas and disabled children who need medical treatment．（高分句型一）It is to be held on the playground of our school at 9 am next Sunday．Students，as well as teachers，parents and sponsors，are invited to participate in it．（高分句型二）
The first part of the activity is 800 metres，1，500 metres and 3，000 metres runs．After that，the money-raising part will start．I think the activity not only helps people in need but is a good chance for us to do exercise．（高分句型三）If you are interested，we can go there together．
Looking forward to your reply．
Yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書面表達屬于提綱類作文，根據(jù)提示信息學(xué)校下周六將舉行Run for Love 公益活動，旨在為貧困地區(qū)的學(xué)生和殘疾兒童募捐．請給你的朋友Tom 寫封電子郵件邀請他一同參加，寫作時注意以下幾點：1、仔細閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，明確幾個要點：活動的時間、地點及目的；活動的內(nèi)容：跑步、捐款等． 2、提綱圖表是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進行分析、構(gòu)思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來寫．本文寫作時可以按照要點所給的順序?qū)懀?、根據(jù)要表達的內(nèi)容確定句子的時態(tài)、語態(tài)；就本文而言應(yīng)該用一般現(xiàn)在時態(tài)．4．注意使用高級詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點．
【亮點說明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達：is intended to 目的是；raise money籌集錢；participate in參加；not only…but also…不僅…而且；
The activity sponsored by some charitable organizations is intended to raise money for students in poor areas and disabled children who need medical treatment．（高分句型一）
Students，as well as teachers，parents and sponsors，are invited to participate in it．（高分句型二）
I think the activity not only helps people in need but is a good chance for us to do exercise．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Tom，
      I'd like to invite you to join us for the Run for Love．The activity sponsored by some charitable organizations is intended to raise money for students in poor areas and disabled children who need medical treatment．（高分句型一）It is to be held on the playground of our school at 9 am next Sunday．Students，as well as teachers，parents and sponsors，are invited to participate in it．（高分句型二）
      The first part of the activity is 800 metres，1，500 metres and 3，000 metres runs．After that，the money-raising part will start．I think the activity not only helps people in need but is a good chance for us to do exercise．（高分句型三）If you are interested，we can go there together．
      Looking forward to your reply．
                                                                                                                                                                                                                                          Yours，
                                                                                                                                                                                                                                          Li Hua

點評 英語寫作是一項主觀性較強的測試題．它不僅考查學(xué)生的寫作基礎(chǔ)而且還考查學(xué)生在寫作過程中綜合運用語言的能力．在撰寫時要注意主謂語一致，時態(tài)呼應(yīng)，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓(xùn)練：一是語言基礎(chǔ)方面的訓(xùn)練，要有扎實的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識和能力 方面的訓(xùn)練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．