Question

2012年10月9日，巴基斯坦十五歲女孩馬拉拉在放學(xué)回家途中遭到塔利班暗殺，頭部中槍�？祻�(fù)后，馬拉拉不畏威脅、積極為巴基斯坦女童爭取受教育權(quán)利。聯(lián)合國將每年的7月12日（她的生日）定為“馬拉拉日”（Malala Day）。作為同齡人的你，請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下提示，用英語寫一篇短文。你的短文應(yīng)包括以下內(nèi)容：

1．簡述馬拉拉的故事；
2.說明教育的重要性（至少兩點(diǎn)）；
3．談?wù)剬W(xué)校教育對(duì)你的影響（至少兩點(diǎn)）。
注意：
1.作文詞數(shù)120左右。開頭已經(jīng)寫好，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。
2.作文中不得提及有關(guān)考生個(gè)人身份的任何信息，如校名、人名等。
On October 9, 2012, Malala, a 15-year-old Pakistani girl, was shot i一飛the head by the Taliban on

Answer 1

On  October 9,2012,Malala,a 15-year-old girl, was shot in the head by the Taliban  on her way home from school. However, the Taliban failed to silence her. After a  miraculous recovery，she was committed to fighting for girls’ right to education. In honor of her bravery and devotion, the UN declared July 12(her birthday) as Malala Day.
Deeply inspired by the story of Malala, I firmly believe in the significance of education. It enables people to raise their voices for rights and change the world by calling for more equality. Furthermore, education promotes the development of science and technology as well as more values and world peace. Without education, people may become weak, fearful and hopeless.
When I reflect on my own experience, I feel grateful I have a lot from my school education. To begin with, I have acquired knowledge and skills to prepare myself for the future. In addition, school education provides me with opportunities to broaden my horizon and better myself. Finally, I have learned to be a more caring and loving human being.

解析試題分析：這是一篇開放性作文寫作,要求有三個(gè)：1．簡述馬拉拉的故事；2.說明教育的重要性（至少兩點(diǎn)）；
3．談?wù)剬W(xué)校教育對(duì)你的影響（至少兩點(diǎn)）。但是具體的內(nèi)容要考生自己發(fā)揮。對(duì)于考生的綜合能力要求較高，要求考生有很強(qiáng)的謀篇布局的能力和組織要點(diǎn)的能力。在完成開放性作文時(shí)，首先要選擇自己熟悉的短語或者句型，在你的能力范圍之內(nèi)，選擇句式時(shí)要賦予變化，因?yàn)檫@樣你才可以更好的駕馭。同時(shí)也要選擇合適的連接詞，把各個(gè)要點(diǎn)組織成一個(gè)完整的整體，如besides, further, last but not least等。在發(fā)表個(gè)人觀點(diǎn)的時(shí)候，可以使用諺語來提升整個(gè)文章的檔次和文采，也能增加得高分的可能性。
【亮點(diǎn)說明】文章使用了很好的短語和句子： fail to 沒能做某事， be committed to致力于…， fight for 為…而斗爭，In honor of為了紀(jì)念…，as well as 不但，而且，reflect on反思， broaden my horizon開闊我的視野，call for要求， Deeply inspired by the story of Malala, I firmly believe in the significance of education.這句話使用了過去分詞做狀語，還有范文的一大亮點(diǎn)是關(guān)聯(lián)詞的使用，如：Furthermore, To begin with, In addition, Finally。
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