Question

假如你是新華中學(xué)的學(xué)生李華，你的美國朋友Tom一周前給你發(fā)電子郵件，詢問你寒假里的打算，但你因準(zhǔn)備期末考試未能及時(shí)回復(fù)。請根據(jù)以下要點(diǎn)給他回封郵件：
1. 未及時(shí)回信的原因；
2. 你假期的打算（如做兼職、補(bǔ)習(xí)、旅行、做志愿者等,請列舉至少兩點(diǎn)）
注意：1. 詞數(shù)：100詞左右；
2. 可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫。
3. 書信格式與開頭均已給出（不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)）。

Answer 1

Dear Tom,
　　How are you doing? You asked me in your last letter about my plan for the coming summer vacation. I am sorry that I didn’t reply without delay.
　　How I wish I could read and reply your email as soon as I received it. However, I was busy preparing for my final exam at that time, which is vital for me. As a result, I had no choice but to completely focus on my study. I believe that if you were me, you would make the same choice.
　　By the way, I have a busy schedule for my summer vacation. First and foremost, I would do a part- time job, so that my interpersonal skills would be improved. Additionally, I will take a short trip to Beijing to take a summer course in the New Oriental School. Last but not least, maybe I will work as a volunteer for the school as a teaching assistant.
　　These are my plan for the summer vacation. What’s yours? I am looking forward to your earliest reply.

解析試題分析：考查的書信。為了考察考生審題能力，命題人并沒有把如“感謝”、“道歉”、“建議”、“申請”等明顯的字眼放在題中，而是通過考察學(xué)生對題干的審題能力暗示學(xué)生此書信體作文應(yīng)大體包含道歉和告知兩個(gè)方面。因此文章的主干部分要先表示歉意、解釋原因，后寫假期的打算。
從寫作要點(diǎn)和得分點(diǎn)來看，考生應(yīng)在宏觀上把握書信體寫作的要求，如格式、文體等，寫作段落以三段式為宜，首段體現(xiàn)問候、寫信背景等，尾段再次致歉、也可詢問Tom暑假里的打算，體現(xiàn)書信體的交際性；而中間段具體交待未及時(shí)回信的原因、假期的打算。考生在微觀層面上應(yīng)具體把握寫作的內(nèi)容和語言，做到句子之間有效的連接，長短句結(jié)合，多用doing及物做主語，句子加半句原因、結(jié)果、目的等具體細(xì)節(jié)的解釋、利用簡單而有效的中文思路擴(kuò)展英文細(xì)節(jié)。考生若能在寫作部分做到內(nèi)容充實(shí)符合要求、語言精彩與眾不同、結(jié)構(gòu)清晰一目了然。
【亮點(diǎn)說明】文中使用了非常好的短語和句子為文章增色不少，比如as soon as，be busy doing，prepare for，be vital for, by the way. , Last but not least, look forward to；還運(yùn)用which引導(dǎo)的非限定性定語從句，并注意了句子的銜接如：but，F(xiàn)irst and foremost，so that，Additionally等等。
考點(diǎn)：書信類寫作