Question

假如你是李華，下星期六是你的生日，你準(zhǔn)備在家開(kāi)一個(gè)生日晚會(huì)，并邀請(qǐng)部分同學(xué)和外國(guó)朋友參加，晚會(huì)7：30開(kāi)始。你家住在英才路（Yingcai Road）228號(hào)，乘3路或16路公共汽車在實(shí)驗(yàn)中學(xué)站下車。你家就在車站的對(duì)面。房子是紅色的。門是白色的，很容易找到。請(qǐng)根據(jù)所給信息，給你的好友Jack寫一封邀請(qǐng)信。
注意： 1. 詞數(shù)100左右；
2. 可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；
3. 開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)和結(jié)束語(yǔ)已為你寫好。
228 Yingcai Road 
September 11, 2013
Dear Jack, 
Next Saturday will be my birthday. ___________________________________________________________
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Best wishes.
Yours truly,
Li Hua

Answer 1

One possible version:
228 Yingcai Road 
September 11, 2013
 Dear Jack, 
    Next Saturday will be my birthday. I’m going to hold a birthday party at home in the evening. It will start at 7:30. Some classmates as well as some foreign friends are also invited. The activities include singing, dancing and sharing interesting experiences. Surely, we’ll have a good time. I would feel honored if you could come.
I live at 228 Yingcai Road. You can take Buses No 3 or No 16 and get off at the stop of Shiyan High School. Just on the opposite of the stop is my house which is red with a white door. I’m sure you can’t miss it.
I do hope you will come.
Best wishes.
Yours, 
Li Hua

解析試題分析：本文是篇邀請(qǐng)函應(yīng)用文，邀請(qǐng)對(duì)方參加自己的生日聚會(huì)。內(nèi)容提示較詳細(xì)，學(xué)生容易把握寫作要求和寫作目的�？忌�在寫作之前要認(rèn)真審題，根據(jù)提示寫作主要有兩部分內(nèi)容，一是要誠(chéng)摯地邀請(qǐng)對(duì)方參加自己的party，簡(jiǎn)單介紹party的情況。其次介紹到自己家的路線。另外，要注意文章的時(shí)態(tài)，要用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)和一般將來(lái)時(shí)。人稱有單數(shù)也要用復(fù)數(shù)比較好把握。再有就是不能根據(jù)材料逐字逐句的翻譯應(yīng)該注意句子的銜接，以提高作文的檔次。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】文章符合邀請(qǐng)函的寫作要求，要點(diǎn)齊全，表達(dá)思路明確，知識(shí)點(diǎn)運(yùn)用恰當(dāng)?shù)轿唬�文中使用了非常好的短語(yǔ)和句子為文章增色不少，比如include， do hope表強(qiáng)調(diào)，on the opposite of等， 還運(yùn)用了倒裝Just on the opposite of the stop is my house，定語(yǔ)從句which is red with a white door.及狀語(yǔ)從句I would feel honored if you could come.等。并注意了句子的銜接如：surely，as well as等。
考點(diǎn)：應(yīng)用文——邀請(qǐng)函