Question

18．假設(shè)你是李華，你購買了一臺(tái)聯(lián)想牌筆記本電腦（Lenovo Y480TFI ），因有質(zhì)量問題
要求該公司為你更換一臺(tái)新電腦．請(qǐng)你根據(jù)下列要點(diǎn)，用英文寫一封電子郵件．
要點(diǎn)：1．問題：電腦啟動(dòng)后噪音過大，出現(xiàn)自動(dòng)關(guān)機(jī)現(xiàn)象；  型號(hào)新，無備件，無法維修；
該產(chǎn)品在購買點(diǎn)已售完，至少三個(gè)月才能更換；
 2．要求：公司盡快予以更換．
注意：1．詞數(shù)100左右；
  2．電子郵件的開頭和結(jié)尾已為你寫好，不計(jì)人總詞數(shù)．
參考詞匯：備件spare parts        最新型號(hào) the latest model．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書面表達(dá)屬于提綱類作文，根據(jù)提示信息用英文寫一封電子郵件，寫作時(shí)注意以下幾點(diǎn)：1、仔細(xì)閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，明確幾個(gè)要點(diǎn)：分別從問題和要求兩個(gè)方面來討論該話題 2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進(jìn)行分析、構(gòu)思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來寫．本文寫作時(shí)可以按照要點(diǎn)所給的順序?qū)懀?、根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定句子的時(shí)態(tài)、語態(tài)；就本文而言應(yīng)該用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)．4．注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點(diǎn)．
【亮點(diǎn)說明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達(dá)：First of all首先；To make matters worse更糟是；As a consequence結(jié)果是；
I had no choice but to take it to the seller，but was informed that the model had been sold out and I had to wait at least three months for a new one．（高分句型一）
   I would appreciate it very much if you could take my request into consideration．（高分句型二）

解答 Dear Sir，
     I am writing to you for the laptop of Lenovo Y480 TFT I bought on 20^th September 2015 at Suning in Wuhan．
     Ten days after I bought it，it didn't work well as expected．First of all，a loud noise appeared after it ran． To make matters worse，sometimes it shut off by itself．I had no choice but to take it to the seller，but was informed that the model had been sold out and I had to wait at least three months for a new one．（高分句型一）Later I could not help but turn to a repairman．He explained to me that since it was the latest model in China，it was almost impossible to fix it without the right spare parts．I was so desperate on hearing that．I also can't tolerate the thought of waiting such a long time．As a consequence，I require that you send me a new one of the same model within a month．
     I would appreciate it very much if you could take my request into consideration．（高分句型二）An early reply at your convenience is expected．
                                                       Sincerely yours，
                                                       Li   Hua

點(diǎn)評(píng) 英語寫作是一項(xiàng)主觀性較強(qiáng)的測(cè)試題．它不僅考查學(xué)生的寫作基礎(chǔ)而且還考查學(xué)生在寫作過程中綜合運(yùn)用語言的能力．在撰寫時(shí)要注意主謂語一致，時(shí)態(tài)呼應(yīng)，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓(xùn)練：一是語言基礎(chǔ)方面的訓(xùn)練，要有扎實(shí)的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識(shí)造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識(shí)和能力 方面的訓(xùn)練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．