Question

假設你是李華，從電視上看到H7N9流感仍然在上海流行，并有少部分人因此而喪生，
你為你正在上海上的筆友Anderon的健康與安全擔心。請你給他寫一封信詢問他的情
況，并給他提出防護建議。
　　要點：
　　1、詢問（他的健康狀況；人們對流行疾病的反應：是否感到恐懼等）
　　2、建議（至少三點）
　　注意：詞數(shù)：120左右；
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Yor incerely.

Answer 1

One possible version：
Dear Anderson,
From TV I know there are still many H7N9 flu cases reported in Shanghai and some people are even killed as a result .I’m so worried about you .So I am writing to get to know some information about you .Are you all right ?Are there any H7N9 flu cases in your school ?Are you still afraid of this widespread sisease ?
To stay away from the disease , I strongly suggest you doing the following things .Firstly , you’d better stay at home as much as possible and not go to places where there are many people .Then it would be a good idea to wash your hands more often to keep them clean .Besides , open the window to have more fresh air in the room.And last but not least , eat more fruits and vegetables to keep yourself fit and strong.
So far the disease is not so deadly as it seems to be .Do be at ease! Take care and you’ll be ok.
Yours ,
LiHua

試題分析：本文要求寫一封書信，學生們對書信這種題材比較熟悉，而且格式已經(jīng)給出，只需根據(jù)要求把要點表達清楚即可。書信內(nèi)容一般首先提出寫信的目的，就本文而言應該先寫出目前H7N9存在的情況以及對朋友健康和安全的擔心，然后再提出防護意見。在提建議的時候應該按照要求至少給出三點建議，為了使文章層次清晰應該使用一些表示順序的連詞，如：first、second、third；或者besides、moreover、what’s more等。此外，在寫作時還有盡量使用多種句式，比如狀語從句、定語從句和強調(diào)句型等，以增添文章的亮點。
【亮點說明】本篇范文層次清晰，要點全面。開門見山提出了寫信的目的，而且連續(xù)用了三個疑問句來詢問朋友及他周圍的情況，表達了作者深切的關愛之情。在表述建議時，作者用了firstly、then、besides和last bur not least等詞語有效地起到了連接作用，不僅顯得段落層次清晰，而且使文章結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，語義連貫。在本文中作者多使用了簡單句和一些短語，如To stay away from the disease，last but not least等 ,使文章語言簡潔流暢,讀起來朗朗上口。