Question

假設(shè)你是李華，是某外國(guó)語(yǔ)學(xué)校的一名學(xué)生。最近，你班將舉辦一個(gè)主題為How shall we behave ourselves in school?的班會(huì)。請(qǐng)你根據(jù)以下要點(diǎn)寫(xiě)一篇英語(yǔ)短文：
1. 紀(jì)律方面；2. 學(xué)習(xí)方面；3. 人際關(guān)系方面。
注意：
1. 標(biāo)題和開(kāi)頭已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。
2. 可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，使文章內(nèi)容充實(shí)、連貫。
3. 詞數(shù)：120左右。
How shall we behave ourselves in school
As students, it is important for us to behave ourselves in school.
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Yours,
Li Hua

Answer 1

As students, it is important for us to behave ourselves in school. Here is what I think we should do:
First, we should obey the school rules. In class, don’t talk with each other, eat food or use mobile phones. After class, we should behave politely to each other. Second, we are supposed to finish our homework in time and prepare the new lessons. Only by listening to our teachers attentively in class and working hard after class can we do well in our lessons. Last but not least, it is important to get along well with our teachers and classmates. A pleasant relationship with them can contribute much to our studies.

試題分析：考查提綱作文，考生首先要仔細(xì)審題，話題是How shall we behave ourselves in school?要點(diǎn)是已經(jīng)給出1. 紀(jì)律方面；2. 學(xué)習(xí)方面；3. 人際關(guān)系方面。要考慮以下幾個(gè)方面：（1）層次結(jié)構(gòu)，（2）句子的時(shí)態(tài)（3）內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)。尤其是內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)要把握準(zhǔn)確到位，要點(diǎn)需要考生拿捏準(zhǔn)確以及正確，又要包括所有的要點(diǎn)，考生要注意盡可能使句子的表達(dá)形式多樣化，適當(dāng)?shù)氖褂靡恍└呒?jí)句式和高級(jí)詞匯，以提高書(shū)面表達(dá)的檔次和可讀性。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】文中使用了好的短語(yǔ)和句子為文章增色不少，比如：be supposed to 應(yīng)該，contribute much to 對(duì)…有很大貢獻(xiàn)，Here is what I think we should do這句話用了表語(yǔ)從句， Only by listening to our teachers attentively in class and working hard after class can we do well in our lessons. 這句話用了倒裝句， it is important to get along well with our teachers and classmates. 這句話用了it做形式主語(yǔ)，還有文章還使用了First, Second, Last but not least,這樣的關(guān)聯(lián)詞使文章更加連貫。