Question

【題目】假如你是高二學(xué)生李華，你的美國筆友Sam發(fā)e-mail詢問你的暑假計劃。請你用e-mail回復(fù)他，要點(diǎn)如下：

1. 到社區(qū)或福利院去做志愿服務(wù)；

2. 學(xué)習(xí)有關(guān)機(jī)器人的知識；

3. 和家人或朋友去旅游。

提示詞：福利院Welfare House

注意：1. 詞數(shù)100左右；

2. 可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫。

Dear Sam,

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Yours,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Sam,

Nice to get your email. I’m glad to share with you my summer plan, which is expected to be delightful and meaningful.

The first part of my holiday will be devoted to the voluntary work, during which time I intend to visit the Welfare House to care for the orphans. In addition to finishing my homework, I’d like to bury myself in learning something more about the robot, which has long been my appetite since childhood. Finally, my holiday will end up with a family tour around Fujian Province, whose scenery is a feast for eyes.

Such is my summer plan. Would you mind telling me yours? I’m looking forward to your reply.

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】本篇書面表達(dá)屬于應(yīng)用文，要求寫一封電子郵件。

第1步：根據(jù)提示可知，本篇為一封電子郵件；美國筆友Sam發(fā)e-mail詢問你的暑假計劃，這里要用e-mail回復(fù)他。時態(tài)應(yīng)為一般現(xiàn)在時。

第2步：根據(jù)寫作要求，確定關(guān)鍵詞（組），如： the voluntary work,visit the Welfare House，robot，tour等。

第3步：根據(jù)提示及關(guān)鍵詞（組）進(jìn)行遣詞造句，注意主謂一致和時態(tài)問題。

第4步：連句成文，注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞進(jìn)行句子之間的銜接與過渡，書寫一定要規(guī)范清晰，保持整潔美觀的卷面是非常重要的。

【亮點(diǎn)說明】

范文內(nèi)容完整，語言規(guī)范，語篇連貫，詞數(shù)適當(dāng)。作者在范文中使用了較多高級表達(dá)方式，如 I’m glad to share with you my summer plan, which is expected to be delightful and meaningful.，The first part of my holiday will be devoted to the voluntary work, during which time I intend to visit the Welfare House to care for the orphans., I’d like to bury myself in learning something more about the robot, which has long been my appetite since childhood.全文中沒有中國式英語的句式，顯示了很高的駕馭英語的能力。另外，文章思路清晰、層次分明，上下句轉(zhuǎn)換自然，為文章增色添彩。