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9．ETL International English Summer Camp
Volunteer Wanted
    EIL was founded in Britain in 1936 with the fundamental aim of international understanding"Learn to live together by living together"．
Requirements：Over 16； good knowledge of English； outgoing； working well with children between 7-12
Activities； Language study，outdoor recreation and travel
Campers； Students from different countries
Camp site； Mount Wuyi，F(xiàn)ujian
Time：July 26-August 9
Application deadline； July 15，2014
If interested，please e-mail to info@eiuk．org
假設(shè)你是李華，這則廣告引起了你的興趣，請用英文寫一封自薦信．要點(diǎn)如下：
1．對夏令營主題的理解；2．根據(jù)招聘要求自我介紹；3．參加夏令營的目的．
注意：1．信的開頭和結(jié)尾已為你寫好，不計入總詞數(shù)；2．詞數(shù)120左右．
Dear Sir，
      I'm Li Hua from China．                                           
                           
I am looking forward to your early reply．

Answer 1

分析 本書面表達(dá)屬于書信類文章，要求根據(jù)提示信息寫一封自薦信．寫作時注意以下幾點(diǎn)：1、仔細(xì)閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，明確有哪些要點(diǎn)．2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進(jìn)行分析、構(gòu)思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來寫．3、根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定句子的時態(tài)、語態(tài)；就本文而言應(yīng)該用一般現(xiàn)在時態(tài)．4．注意使用高級詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點(diǎn)．
【亮點(diǎn)說明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明．使用了多種句式和短語，比如the aim of表示目的是…..，I think it helpful to learn to live together by living together．這句話用it做形式賓語，避免頭輕腳重．It's a good opportunity for sb．to do sth．表示對某人來說做某事是個好機(jī)會．Recommend sb．To表示推薦某人做某事．For one thing，for another thing的使用使文章更有層次感，也使語言更加連貫．

解答 Dear Sir，
I'm Li Hua from Fujian，When I was reading the advertisement，the aim of this activity impressed me greatly．（高分句型） I think it helpful to learn to live together by living together．It is a good opportunity for the only child like me to learn to share and work together．（高分句型） Therefore，I recommend myself to you without hesitation．（對夏令營主題的理解）
As a boy of 17，I am outgoing，good at English and have experience of working well with children aged from 7 to 12．（高分句型） I think it is a kind of win-win activity．（自我介紹）For one thing，I can help take care of the children．For another thing，I can improve my English，make more friends，and enrich my life during the summer vacation．（高分句型）（參加夏令營的目的）I am looking forward to your early reply．
Yours Sincerely，
Li Hua

點(diǎn)評 應(yīng)該注意適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)以使行文連貫，比如適當(dāng)選用表示因果、遞進(jìn)、轉(zhuǎn)折關(guān)系的連接詞，使文章流暢、通順，并避免因反復(fù)使用句式相同的簡單句而造成的單調(diào)感．（1）認(rèn)真審題，確定體裁． （2）構(gòu)思要點(diǎn)．根據(jù)題目要求，理解要表達(dá)的要點(diǎn)．設(shè)計好文章的層次段落，考慮所用時態(tài)、人稱等，把要點(diǎn)串聯(lián)起來，構(gòu)成文章框架．（3）選詞造句，避難選易．（4）認(rèn)真檢查，避免錯誤．仔細(xì)閱讀全文，查找是否有錯，注意時態(tài)、單詞拼寫、字母大小寫、標(biāo)點(diǎn)是否有誤，句式是否正確．邏輯是否一致．