Question

【題目】假如你是高三一班李華，看到了學(xué)校學(xué)生會(huì)近期要舉辦成人禮儀式(Adult Ceremony)的一則招募志愿者啟事，你非常感興趣，請(qǐng)根據(jù)要點(diǎn)給學(xué)生會(huì)李老師寫(xiě)一封應(yīng)征郵件。要點(diǎn)包括：

1. 你的相關(guān)特長(zhǎng)（組織能力，創(chuàng)造力等）

2. 你對(duì)成人禮儀式的認(rèn)識(shí)。

注意： 1. 詞數(shù)100左右。2. 可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫。

Dear Mr. Li,

_______________________________________________________________________________

_______________________________________________________________________________

_______________________________________________________________________________

_______________________________________________________________________________

_______________________________________________________________________________

_______________________________________________________________________________

_______________________________________________________________________________

_______________________________________________________________________________

_______________________________________________________________________________

_______________________________________________________________________________

Yours,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】

One Possible Version

Dear Mr. Li,

I’m Li Hua, a student from Class 1, Grade 3. I’m writing to apply to be a volunteer in the coming Adult Ceremony.

First of all, I am convinced that I am well qualified for the job. I am skilled at organizing activities as well as communicating with others and I have the ability to deal with emergencies. Besides, I am highly creative, which is of vital importance to this activity. As far as I am concerned, Adult Ceremony is of great significance to all of the students. Not only can it raise students’ sense of responsibility, but also it can make it possible for us to be partially independent of our parents. What’s more, students can learn to express their gratitude to their teachers as well as their parents.

In conclusion, I would appreciate it if I am admitted as a volunteer in the Adult Ceremony. Thank you for considering my application.

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】

試題分析：本文要求一封應(yīng)征郵件，應(yīng)征成人禮儀式的志愿者。寫(xiě)作時(shí)注意以下幾點(diǎn)：1.涵蓋所有內(nèi)容。2、根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定句子的時(shí)態(tài)、語(yǔ)態(tài)；就本文而言應(yīng)該用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)，以第一稱(chēng)為主。3、注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點(diǎn)。

【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】文章使用了非常好的短語(yǔ)和句子給文章增色，如賓語(yǔ)從句I am convinced that I am well qualified for the job.；非限制性定語(yǔ)從句I am highly creative, which is of vital importance to this activity.；部分倒裝Not only can it raise students’ sense of responsibility…；deal with處理，解決；As far as I am concerned就我而言；as well as以及，和；In conclusion總的來(lái)說(shuō)；還有First of all，Besides，What’s more等有效地使語(yǔ)句間連接緊湊。