Question

【題目】假定你是李華。你的筆友Helen給你發(fā)來電子郵件，詢問你在當(dāng)?shù)貧v史博物館當(dāng)志愿者 的經(jīng)歷。請根據(jù)以下提示給她回一封電子郵件，與她分享這一經(jīng)歷。

要點提示：

1.活動的經(jīng)歷和感受；

1） 充當(dāng)講解員（narrator）,幫助參觀者了解當(dāng)?shù)氐臍v史和文化；

2） 給參觀者，尤其是殘疾人提供便利。累并快樂著：

2.活動的意義。

注意：1. 詞數(shù)120左右；

2. 可以適當(dāng)增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫；

3. 開頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)。

Dear Helen,

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Looking forward to your early reply!

Yours,

Li hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Helen,

How are you? I’m writing to share with you my volunteer experience in the local history museum.

Being a volunteer means challenges and responsibility. As a narrator, my daily routine involved introducing the local history and culture to visitors. On top of this, I spared no efforts to provide assistance for visitors, especially the disabled. My top priority was to make sure all the visitors could enjoy the comfort and convenience of modern tourism. Tired as I was, the smiles on their faces lit up my day.

The volunteering experience , undoubtedly , can help promote ancient civilizations. Meanwhile, It gives me an unusual chance to learn from the past, which offers me a new angle to approach problems. Therefore, I strongly recommend that everyone play a part in preserving history.

Looking forward to your early reply!

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】

本篇書面表達屬于應(yīng)用文，要求考生寫一封電子郵件，和朋友分享在當(dāng)?shù)貧v史博物館當(dāng)志愿者的經(jīng)歷。

第一步：審題

體裁：應(yīng)用文

時態(tài)：根據(jù)提示，時態(tài)應(yīng)為一般現(xiàn)在時和一般過去時。

結(jié)構(gòu)：總分法

總分法指把主題句作為總說，把支持句作為分說，并以這種方式安排所寫內(nèi)容。

要求：1. 表明郵件意圖

2. 活動相關(guān)

1）活動經(jīng)歷

2）活動感受

3）活動意義

第二步:列提綱 （重點詞組）

history museum；volunteer；introduce；visitor；disabled；learn from；play a part in；look forward to

第三步：連詞成句

1. I’m writing to you about my experience as a volunteer in the local history museum.

2. I worked as a narrator，introducing the local history and culture to visitors.

3. I helped visitors and provided convenience for disabled.

4. The volunteer experience benefited me a lot.

5. I have learned much knowledge in the museum.

6. Helping others also made me fulfilled.

7. Look forward to your reply.

根據(jù)提示及關(guān)鍵詞（組）進行遣詞造句，注意主謂一致和時態(tài)問題。

第四步：連句成篇（銜接詞）

1.表文章結(jié)構(gòu)順序：First of all, Firstly/First, Secondly/Second… And then, Finally, In the end, At last

2.表并列補充關(guān)系：What is more, Besides, Moreover, Furthermore, In addition As well as, not only…but (also), including,

3.表轉(zhuǎn)折對比關(guān)系：However, On the contrary, but, Although+clause(從句), In spite of+n/doing,On the one hand…,On the other hand… Some…,while others…,as for, so…that…

4.表因果關(guān)系：Because, As, So, Thus, Therefore, As a result

連句成文，注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞進行句子之間的銜接與過渡，書寫一定要規(guī)范清晰，

第五步：潤色修改