Question

【題目】假如你是李華，你的美國網友Peter參加中國象棋網絡挑戰(zhàn)賽獲得了一等獎。請根據以下提示寫一封英文電子郵件向他表示祝賀。

1) 祝賀他獲獎；

2) 肯定他付出的努力；

3) 詢問何時方便，在網上切磋棋藝。

注意：1)詞數100左右；

2)可以適當增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫；

3)開頭和結尾已為你寫好。

參考詞匯：the Chinese Chess Network Challenge

Dear Peter,

I am writing to offer my sincere congratulations

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Congratulations again.

Yours,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Peter,

I am writing to offer my sincere congratulations to you on your winning the first prize in the Chinese Chess Network Challenge. As your friend, I just want you to know how glad I am at your success.

“Everything comes to him who waits.” For these years, you’ve shown great interest in Chinese chess and kept on practicing it every day. Not only have you read many books about Chinese chess strategy, but also you have competed in all kinds of Chinese chess contests. Finally, you succeeded in winning the online competition!

So I’m so happy that you become champion of this network challenge. At last, I hope to play Chinese chess with you so that we can make progress together. Please tell me when you have time.

Congratulations again.

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】

本篇書面表達屬于應用文，要求寫一封祝賀信。

第一步：

審題：祝賀信 祝賀Peter參加中國象棋網絡挑戰(zhàn)賽獲得了一等獎

人稱：第一、二人稱

時態(tài)：一般現在時

結構：總分法，分三部分，第一部分祝賀Peter獲獎，第二部分肯定Peter付出的努力，

第三部分想與他在網上切磋棋藝，詢問何時方便，并再次表示祝賀。

要點：

1. 祝賀Peter獲得中國象棋網絡挑戰(zhàn)賽一等獎

2．肯定Peter付出的努力

①每天堅持練習

②閱讀有關象棋策略的書籍

③參加各種中國象棋比賽；

3．想與他在網上切磋棋藝，詢問何時方便

4.再次表示祝賀

第二步：列提綱（重點詞匯、短語）

congratulations to sb. on …；win the first prize；be glad at；show interest in；keep on doing…；chess strategy；compete in；contest；succeed in；win the competition； champion；play Chinese chess；make progress

第三步：連詞成句

(1)I am writing to offer my sincere congratulations to you on your winning the first prize in the Chinese Chess Network Challenge.

(2) You’ve shown great interest in Chinese chess.

(3) You keep on practicing it every day.

(4) You have read many books about Chinese chess strategy.

(5) You have competed in all kinds of Chinese chess contests.

(6) You succeeded in winning the online competition!

(7) You become champion of this network challenge.

(8) I hope to play Chinese chess with you.

(9)We can make progress together.

根據提示和關鍵詞進行遣詞造句,適當地運用句型，注意時態(tài)和主謂一致問題。

第四步：連句成篇(銜接詞)

表示時間順序： first of all; to begin/start with , in the beginning

firstly.... secondly .... lastly / finally/in the end

表示并列或補充關系： what is more; besides, moreover, apart from;

in addition, as well as；not only…but(also), meanwhile, in the meantime, some...some…others

表示轉折對比關系：but, however, although, though, yet, while

on one hand…on the other hand ...,

表示因果關系：because, as, therefore, as a result, as a consequence , consequently, thus

連句成文，運用恰當的銜接詞進行句子之間的銜接與過渡，使句與句之間邏輯性更強、

段與段之間結構清晰。