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假定你是李華，在一個(gè)英文網(wǎng)絡(luò)論壇上，你看到一個(gè)名叫Grown-up的中學(xué)生發(fā)帖(post)尋求幫助，請(qǐng)根據(jù)帖子的內(nèi)容、寫作要點(diǎn)和要求回帖。

Grown-up        Post at 20-05-2013  18:30                             1#

Hi, everyone,   I’m a Senior Grade Three student, and I am suffering from mental pressure these days, what should I do?  TOP

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寫作要點(diǎn)：
1. 告訴Grown-up心理壓力不可避免；      2. 告訴Grown-up心里壓力的危害；
3. 建議Grown-up應(yīng)正確面對(duì)心理壓力；    4. 介紹你面對(duì)心里壓力時(shí)所采取的措施。
注意：
1. 詞數(shù)100左右。
2. 可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫。
3. 文章的開頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。

Answer 1

Hi,Grown-up:
It’s a fact that we face more and more mental pressure in our life. In my opinion, everyone will meet some mental pressure in their life. But if it lasts along time, it may do harm to our body.
Whenever I meet pressure, I try to keep calm and think how to overcome it, sometimes it is very effective. When I’m stressed out, I listen to music or do some sports. After that, I often find that my moods become much better. If I can’t overcome it, I will turn to my parents, teachers or good friends.
To sum up, we should face pressure bravely and overcome it actively.
Hope my ideas work.

試題分析：本題為材料作文，在寫作之前要注意審題，一是要寫到哪些方面的內(nèi)容，就本作文來(lái)說(shuō)主要介紹四個(gè)方面的問(wèn)題。二是作文的時(shí)態(tài)，從內(nèi)容上來(lái)看，應(yīng)該采用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)。但在寫作時(shí)應(yīng)該知道，這是在寫作文，故四個(gè)方面的問(wèn)題不能逐個(gè)翻譯，要上下連貫，形成有機(jī)的整體。
三在形成句子時(shí)，文章要有亮點(diǎn)，使用高級(jí)的句型結(jié)構(gòu)，使文章顯得語(yǔ)言不斷變幻。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】所給范文中有兩個(gè)顯著的閃光點(diǎn)，一是開頭所用主語(yǔ)從句恰到好處，使用了較復(fù)雜的句型結(jié)構(gòu)。本句It’s a fact that we face more and more pressre in our life.是主語(yǔ)從句的典型例子，二是這篇文章緊扣題目要求，一語(yǔ)點(diǎn)破中心，例如第二自然段直接說(shuō)明了所采取的措施。