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8．近些年來(lái)，隨著人們生活水平的日益改善，飼養(yǎng)寵物的人們的數(shù)量與日俱增．飼養(yǎng)寵物給人們帶來(lái)快樂(lè)的同時(shí)，也隨之帶來(lái)了一些問(wèn)題．主要有：（一）、寵物發(fā)出的噪音非常擾民；（二）、動(dòng)物的糞便會(huì)污染環(huán)境；（三）、當(dāng)主人帶著寵物去公共場(chǎng)所時(shí)，有些寵物會(huì)嚇著孩子甚至咬人；（四）、某些寵物會(huì)傳播疾病，已經(jīng)引起了人們的廣泛關(guān)注．
假如你是李華，請(qǐng)你就上面提到的人們飼養(yǎng)寵物帶了的問(wèn)題給報(bào)社編輯寫(xiě)一封信，尋求幫助，并期待媒體能夠就解決該問(wèn)題做一些事情．
注意：
1．字?jǐn)?shù)：100左右；
2．可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；
3．信的開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾已經(jīng)給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)．
Dear editor，
I'm sorry to occupy your precious time，but                                    
Yours Sincerely，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 考查開(kāi)放性作文寫(xiě)作，開(kāi)放性作文給出了一個(gè)話題，并有部分的文字提示．給考生自由發(fā)揮的余地較大．對(duì)于考生的綜合能力要求較高，要求考生有很強(qiáng)的謀篇布局的能力和組織要點(diǎn)的能力．在完成開(kāi)放性作文時(shí)，首先要選擇自己熟悉的短語(yǔ)或者句型，在你的能力范圍之內(nèi)，選擇句式時(shí)要賦予變化，因?yàn)檫@樣你才可以更好的駕馭．
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】范文中運(yùn)用一些常見(jiàn)的短語(yǔ)First of all首先；What's more而且；take sth into consideration 認(rèn)真考慮某事；First of all，as it is known to people，pets make much noise that troubles residents a lot這個(gè)句子運(yùn)用到非限制性定語(yǔ)從句；What's more，it is widely accepted that animal waste pollutes the environment，which makes people quite uncomfortable．這個(gè)句子中it做形式主語(yǔ)，真正的主語(yǔ)是后面的that從句；The most important is that pets can spread some diseases and this has attracted much attention．這個(gè)句子運(yùn)用到that引導(dǎo)的表語(yǔ)從句；

解答 Dear editor，
       I'm sorry to occupy your precious time，but I really want to tell you something about the problem of some people keeping too many pets nowadays．（高分句型）I take the problem more and more seriously for the following reasons．
       First of all，as it is known to people，pets make much noise that troubles residents a lot．（高分句型）What's more，it is widely accepted that animal waste pollutes the environment，which makes people quite uncomfortable．（高分句型）Many owners like taking their pets to public places where they may frighten children or even bite people．The most important is that pets can spread some diseases and this has attracted much attention．Taking all these factors into consideration，I sincerely hope that I can get help from you and expect the media to do something for this．（高分句型）
  Yours Sincerely，
    Li Hua

點(diǎn)評(píng) 該注意適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)以使行文連貫，比如適當(dāng)選用表示因果、遞進(jìn)、轉(zhuǎn)折關(guān)系的連接詞，使文章流暢、通順，并避免因反復(fù)使用句式相同的簡(jiǎn)單句而造成的單調(diào)感．（1）認(rèn)真審題，確定體裁． （2）構(gòu)思要點(diǎn)．根據(jù)題目要求，理解要表達(dá)的要點(diǎn)．設(shè)計(jì)好文章的層次段落，考慮所用時(shí)態(tài)、人稱等，把要點(diǎn)串聯(lián)起來(lái)，構(gòu)成文章框架．（3）選詞造句，避難選易．（4）認(rèn)真檢查，避免錯(cuò)誤．仔細(xì)閱讀全文，查找是否有錯(cuò)，注意時(shí)態(tài)、單詞拼寫(xiě)、字母大小寫(xiě)、標(biāo)點(diǎn)是否有誤，句式是否正確．邏輯是否一致．