Question

4．假設(shè)你是紅星中學(xué)高三學(xué)生李華，請根據(jù)以下四幅圖的先后順序，寫一篇英文周記，記錄畢業(yè)前夕你們制作以"感恩母校"為主題的畢業(yè)紀(jì)念視頻的全過程．
注意：詞數(shù)不少于60．
提示詞：視頻video

Answer 1

分析 高分句型：
句型一：
Having had （1）a heated discussion，we agreed on （2）making a video to record our experiences at school．經(jīng)過熱烈的討論，我們一致同意制作視頻記錄我們在學(xué)校的經(jīng)歷．
（1）having had 現(xiàn)在分詞完成式做時(shí)間狀語，相當(dāng)于after引導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語從句；分詞做狀語是書面表達(dá)的亮點(diǎn)句型．
（2）agree on 取得一致意見．
句型二：
Material collecting took us a whole week，during which （1）we interviewed our teachers and took pictures of every aspect of school life（2）．收集材料花費(fèi)了我們整整一個(gè)星期；在此期間我們采訪了老師，拍攝了我們學(xué)校生活的每一方面．
（1）during which 在此期間，which引導(dǎo)的非限制性定語從句，which指代上文的a whole week，非限制性定語從句是書面表達(dá)中常用的高分句型．
（2）every aspect of school life學(xué)校生活的每一方面
句型三：
We debated over （1）what to put into（2）the video．我們就把什么材料放進(jìn)視頻進(jìn)行辯論．
（1）debate over 就…進(jìn)行辯論．
（2）what to put into the video為"疑問詞+to do"相當(dāng)于一個(gè)名詞性從句，本句中相當(dāng)于一個(gè)賓語從句；書面表達(dá)中運(yùn)用"疑問詞+to do"會使得表達(dá)簡練．

解答 Graduation finally came．My classmates and I decided to do something．Having had a heated discussion，we agreed on making a video to record our experiences at school【高分句型一】（圖片一：決定制作視頻）．
       Material collecting took us a whole week，during which we interviewed our teachers and took pictures of every aspect of school life【高分句型二】（圖片2：收集視頻材料）．The editing part after that was tough．We debated over what to put into the video【高分句型三】．Some compromises were unavoidable，but the video turned out perfect．（圖片3：視頻取舍和制作） Several days later，when the video was played on the graduation ceremony，it was well received（圖片4：視頻展示）．The students and teachers shared a great time，which surely gave us a great sense of achievement（結(jié)論）．

點(diǎn)評 寫作時(shí)首先審題要到位：審體裁、人稱和時(shí)態(tài)；審要點(diǎn)．其次要考慮高分詞語和句型的選用，從句、非謂語動(dòng)詞、倒裝、強(qiáng)調(diào)句型等都是可考慮的高級句型；詞語和句型的選用要包含作者的感情色彩和增強(qiáng)表達(dá)的氣勢；再次，運(yùn)用關(guān)聯(lián)詞如besides、what's  more、moreover、for one thing …for another等，使文字更加流暢．