Question

20．假設(shè)你是李華，一名高三學生，在網(wǎng)絡上看到一所國外大學的招生信息 （admission information），該大學對中國學生開設(shè)30多個專業(yè)（major），你對此非常感興趣，打算用英語撰寫一份個人申請，主要內(nèi)容包括：
1 想申請的專業(yè)；
2 個人優(yōu)勢；
3 進入大學后的設(shè)想．
注意：
1 詞數(shù)100左右；
2 書信格式已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)．

Dear Sir or Madam，
I have recently noticed the admission information of your university onthe Internet．I'm writing to apply for management among all the majors offered to us Chinese students．（想申請的專業(yè)）
For one thing，I do well in English and it will be easy for me to complete the coursesin your university．For another，I have been the monitor during my school years，which has promoted myorganizing ability．【高分句型】（個人優(yōu)勢）
Having organized a few school activities successfully，I'm determined to be amanager as my dream job．【高分句型】Therefore，my plan is to join theStudents'Union and participate in some meaningful social activities to learnsome advanced management experience．（進入大學后的設(shè)想）
I'm looking forward to hearing from you soon．
Yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本文是一篇提綱作文．根據(jù)所提供的材料信息，向?qū)χ袊鴮W生開設(shè)30多個專業(yè)的國外一所大學寫一封申請書．寫作要點包括：1．想申請的專業(yè)； 2．個人優(yōu)勢； 3．進入大學后的設(shè)想．時態(tài)以一般現(xiàn)在時為主．人稱以第一人稱和第三人稱為主．重要短語：apply for…（申請…），offer sth to sb（給某人提供某物），do well in …（在…方面做得好），promote my organizingability （提升我的組織能力），be determined to do （下定決心做某事），participate in （參加），hear from sb（收到某人來信）．
【高分句型】
1．I have been the monitor during my school years，which has promoted my organizing ability．
這里是which引導的非限制性定語從句，which在從句中作主語，指代前面整個主句的內(nèi)容．
2．Having organized a few school activities successfully，I'm determined to be a manager as my dream job．
這里是現(xiàn)在分詞的完成式 Having organized 作原因狀語，主句的主語是I與動詞organize構(gòu)成邏輯上的主動關(guān)系．

解答 Dear Sir or Madam，
        I have recently noticed the admission information of your university onthe Internet．I'm writing to apply for management among all the majors offered to us Chinese students．（想申請的專業(yè)）
        For one thing，I do well in English and it will be easy for me to complete the coursesin your university．For another，I have been the monitor during my school years，which has promoted myorganizing ability．【高分句型】（個人優(yōu)勢）
        Having organized a few school activities successfully，I'm determined to be amanager as my dream job．【高分句型】Therefore，my plan is to join theStudents'Union and participate in some meaningful social activities to learnsome advanced management experience．（進入大學后的設(shè)想）
        I'm looking forward to hearing from you soon．
                                                                                                                                                                                                                           Yours Sincerely，
                                                                                                                                                                                                                              Li Hua

點評 英語寫作是一項主觀性較強的測試題．它不僅考查學生的寫作基礎(chǔ)而且還考查學生在寫作過程中綜合運用語言的能力．在撰寫時要注意主謂語一致，時態(tài)呼應，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓練：一是語言基礎(chǔ)方面的訓練，要有扎實的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識和能力 方面的訓練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．