Question

13．5月20日是中國學生營養(yǎng)日．某中學生英文報為此開展征文比賽活動，請根據(jù)以下要點寫一篇征文，談談你對中國肥胖兒童現(xiàn)象的看法和建議．
        內(nèi)容要點：
1．描述現(xiàn)狀：中國肥胖兒童1200多萬；
2．說明理由：常吃快餐，缺少鍛煉；
3．提出建議…
注意：1．可根據(jù)內(nèi)容要點適當發(fā)揮，但不要逐條翻譯；2．詞數(shù)120左右．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇對中國肥胖兒童現(xiàn)象的看法和建議的作文．根據(jù)題目要求可知用第三人稱和一般現(xiàn)在時態(tài)．內(nèi)容包括：一描述現(xiàn)狀；二說明原因；三提出建議．
高分句型：
（1）One of the primary factors that account for the problem is children's addiction to junk food，which adds too much fat and sugar to whoever takes it．句子里 that account for the problem 是定語從句，修飾先行詞是
 the primary factors；which引導非限制性定語從句，代指主句的 junk food．whoever takes it是賓語從句．
造成這個問題的主要原因之一是孩子們喜歡垃圾食品，這些食品會給食用者增加太多的脂肪和糖．
（2）A large number of children would rather sit for hours enjoying themselves in a virtual world than work our regularly．句子里enjoying themselves in a virtual world 是伴隨狀語，和主語A large number of children 是主動關系．would rather…than 表示"和…相比更愿意做某事"．
很多孩子寧愿一坐幾個小時沉溺在虛擬的世界里，也不愿經(jīng)常鍛煉．

解答 Recent yeats have witnessed a growing number of up to 12 million children in China getting more and more overweight．（描述現(xiàn)狀）
When it comes to the obesity problem，the reasons are not far to seek．One of the primary factors that account for the problem is children's addiction to junk food，which adds too much fat and sugar to whoever takes it．【高分句型一】Another factor to mention is children's lack of exercise in everyday life．A large number of children would rather sit for hours enjoying themselves in a virtual world than work our regularly．【高分句型二】To make matters worse，the fact that many children stay up late into night also contributes to the problem．（說明原因）
Personally I believe it is ggreat importance to keep a balance diet，which guarantees proper nutrition in ou body．What's more，a healthy life style is the key to a happy life．It is a healthy body and mind that really matters in promising  us a brighter future after all．（提出建議）

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