Question

你校正在開展“和諧宿舍生活”的主題周活動，請按下列要求寫一篇100-120詞的英語短文向英語社投稿：
1. 闡明和諧宿舍生活的必要性；
2. 提出建議。
注意：短文的開頭已給出（不計詞數(shù)）。
參考詞匯：harmonious和諧的；  harmony和諧
Dormitory life is regarded as an important part of school life. _______________________
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Answer 1

One possible version:
Dormitory life is regarded as an important part of school life. A harmonious dormitory life is of great significance to students’ study and emotion as well. Only in a condition where nothing annoying exists can we put our heart and soul into study. Besides, a dormitory life filled with harmony can promote mutual understanding, helping building up a good relationship between roommates.
In order to maintain a harmonious dormitory life, we should form a healthy style and try to get rid of the bad habits, if there are any. Additionally, when an annoying situation arises, we need to communicate sincerely with or tolerate each other and co-exist. Moreover, we’d better share happiness and sorrow with each other so as to lay a solid foundation for mutual understanding.

試題分析：本文是篇材料作文，對此話題考生非常熟悉，應該有話可說。考生在寫作之前必修認真審題，首先要注意文章的時態(tài)，要求是對構建“和諧宿舍生活”的重要性進行闡述及如何構建 “和諧宿舍生活”提出建議，所以要用一般現(xiàn)在時。其實本篇書面表達的開放程度還是蠻大的。題目中所列的兩點“闡明和諧宿舍生活的必要性”和“提出建議”都需要考生自擬。因此在自擬要點時，考生要注意圍繞主題去聯(lián)想和展開。
【亮點說明】范文使用了非常好的短語和句子為文章增色不少，比如significance，emotion, as well, promote mutual understanding, maintain a harmonious dormitory life get rid of the bad habits等。倒裝句“Only in a condition where nothing annoying exists can we put our heart and soul into study”以及狀語從句“if there are any”“when an annoying situation arises”的運用更是錦上添花。此外非謂語動詞“helping building up, In order to maintain a harmonious dormitory life, try to get rid of ,so as to lay a solid foundation for mutual understanding.”的使用更顯作者語言運用的功力。作者還注意了上下文的銜接：“Besides,，Additionally, Moreover”等等的使用使文章順暢連貫。